Infected: negative?
Sanity: 60%
Health: 84%
Hunger: 20%
Thirst: 10%
Typhoon tells Qibli about the possible infection spreading among the Icewings in Queen Thorn's office, not knowing that Winter is hiding behind a corner listening to the conversation. Winter knocks over a lamp alerting the others. Qibli looks over at Winter and tries to explain, but Winter storms out the room with Qibli following after him. Qibli gets attacked by Winter at the Ice Palace, and in the attack, he receives a bite wound from Winter. Qibli finally kicks winter aside with his legs and flies off into the direction of Jade Mountain to warn the school.
NAME: Prince Winter of The Ice Kingdom
Infected: Positive
Sanity: 10%
Hunger: 110%
Thirst: 100%
Winter went back to the Ice Wing palace after hearing of the plague. He wanted to save his brother Hailstorm, but when he arrived, he found the Ice Wing palace completely empty. All of a sudden, an infected Ice Wing who he believed to be a guard, lunges at Winter knocking him off to the side. Winter successfully fights off the infected Ice Wing but is left with a big bite mark on his leg that won't stop bleeding. Winter starts to thrash violently, and when he realized Qibli has followed him, he tries to make him go away, so he won't get infected as well. Qibli finally kicks Winter aside, and he hits against the icy wall, blacking out for the moment.
Name: Moonwatcher
Infected: Negative
Sanity: 99%
Hunger: 50%
Thirst: 50%
After Qibli comes rushing into Jade Mountain, breathing heavily and speaking in a panicked frenzy to all the dragons, he runs inside into Moon's cave. Moon is busy looking over scrolls, when she sees Qibli burst in. She asks him what is wrong, but all she gleams from his response is, ''...The disease... Winter...it's spreading!'' As she tries her best to calm Qibli down, she rushes to the library to find Sunny teaching a group of dragonets. She takes Sunny aside and tells her everything Qibli told her about the infection. Sunny's face suddenly turns pale, and her and Moon start to look for some books about diseases and cures.
Name: Sunny
Infected: Negative
Sanity: 80%
Hunger: 60%
Thirst: 50%
After hearing about the news of an infection by Moon, Sunny starts to panic. She feels guilty that she let Winter and Qibli go off by themselves when an infection was spreading. She abandons her teaching lesson to a group of students and goes with Moon deeper into the library to look for scrolls concerning diseases and cures. They have found no cure as of yet, but they do have some information about ''The Ice'' infection.
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Shalt we commence with the hexed S’more?
Top Graham Cracker - I’m not familiar with the original story, but I thought I’d take a stab at reviewing this. This is an infection AU of Wings of Fire. It’s the status of the characters, one of which is their sanity levels…which could go down in any moment…
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I have no recommendations to make as of right now, but if you would like to edit this, then you may.
Chocolate Bar - I love the descriptions you give under all of their pictures. They’re just enough to show a bit of the characters’ personalities. I also like that there’s a question mark for Qibli’s infection status. Nobody knows if he’s dangerous yet, but it’s always good to be cautious…
Closing Graham Cracker - Overall, a fantastical status sheet of the characters! I’ll check out the fanfiction if you feel like posting it. I’m quite intrigued. This kind of reminds me of the My Little Pony infection AU lol…
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Hah since I want people to read my fanfiction in a fandom no one but me seems to know about, I guess the first step is also to read fic in fandoms I don’t know =D Lead with example and all!
I kinda like these video game-y stats. Even if I am not sure what they mean yet. Did you draw these pictures? Is this the official art?
Now with how you emphasise this infection from the first… idk what to call it. It’s not really a character profile but it feels too detached and underwritten to be a story beat so… in this, in any case. Maybe this is abt Zombies. That’s my current theory =D
I mean “he receives a bite wound” that is a classic zombie warning!
Alrighty, since Winter is 100% infected, I have little hope for Qibli. And possibly the school, considering that’s where he’s going. I wonder if Qibli will at least get the warning out before the zombification…
But hey, despite this Winter still has 10% sanity… And he hungers. Will probably use those 10 braincells left to find more brains to eat… Thirst though throws a wrench in my zombie theory. Maybe… ZOMBIE VAMPIRE DRAGONS???
Uhm is it Icewings or Ice Wings? You kinda used both.
Oh are we slowly going back in time? It feels like Winter’s section probably happened before Qibli’s huh? And if he wanted to prevent Qibli from getting infected that was probably one of the worst ways to go abt it. Guess this has something to do with the low sanity score too…
And maybe Qibli’s lower sanity in his section is also related to his infection. It seems like sanity is draining real fast. Oh no, I do not think he will arrive at the school in any shape to warn them of anything…
*reads on and is immediately contradicted* Ah well..
I somehow had a feeling Moon would be a gal :3
Hmmm I don’t think this way of presenting the story is for me. I don’t like the many repetitions and passive sentences (like “being told by X” – usually it is always better to have a more active phrasing like “X told Y” 😊)
That said, you had me getting anxious for these characters even in the short bursts of narration and the stat screen was kinda ominious so really good job on that!!
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Okay so first, this is not my official art, I got most of the art from the cover of the Wings of Fire books and Ice Wings, is supposed to be Icewings but you know how auto correct it