THE MYSTERY OF EIGHT FINGERS..... THE NEW GIRL, STELLA IS SUSPICIOUS.SHE HAS EIGHT MINATURE FINGERS ON EACH OF HER TINY HANDS, BUT DETECTIVE ROSEMARY TRIES TO SOLVE THE MYSTERY OF THE EIGHT FINGERS!
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Um.... wow I guess. This seems to be a summary, or preview of a story. This could become a great story if you added more to it. Start with maybe the idea you have now. Think of some ways on WHY rosemary wanted to find out the mystery of the 8 fingers. How did these two characters meet? For 9 years old, this is a pretty nice idea! Do remember not to capitalize the whole thing. That only goes at the beginning of a sentence. Also, space out the words suspicious and she like this : suspicious. She
Describe where they are, what the place looks like, some of thew characters ideas. If you work at it, this story will go far. Since I follow anybody I review, consider yourself followed. Good luck on writing stories, with work, you will do great!
Um this is more of a summery of the story :/ maybe you should've added more to make it seem like a first chapter. I would like to learn more about this story
In will keep track of this story to see how your doing with it.
Good luck!