Hello Lostar
I shortened your user name, hope you don't mind.
I can tell you took time to write this.
There is emotion in it, i can tell.
The words flow pretty well
One thing i suggest is i wouldn't use the bullet points.
I feel that it kinda ruins the reading.
You don't have to do anything i suggest.
I dot see many grammar mistakes but there is a few.
There not big ones that alter the meaning at all.
Either than that... its great!
I hope to read more from you! Have a great day!
Sincerely Anma
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