Self Esteem *please read

Evening.

lizzytink wrote:Self Esteem. Soooo high school isn't working out for you? SAME! This is a list I am conjured up. Do you mean, I have conjured up? Also, there is no need to break the orthology conventions of "So" to "Soooo". I understand you want to sound familiar and colloquial, but it merely sounds as though your point is less important than it deserves to be. No need to do that to your writing.

Stop whining and complaining. Why not format into headings? Non-Fiction should take advantage of graphological layout. You can find all these helpful terms and guides to language terminology by going to http://grammar.about.com < Great gem of a site. Things will go your way if you let them fall into place. Go with the flow. Your life doesn’t have to be full of the stereotypical high school student (drugs, sex, etc.) Your punctuation is absent here, you should add a semi-colon don’t find parties… parties will find you in time. Everything will happen, just be patient.

Be social. The only way to put yourself out there is to let yourself be known. Have a good time with the friends you have. Don’t be too dramatic when things don’t go your way. Everything eventually blows will eventually blow over anyway. Make new friends (if possible) to bring new groups to you. Your personality will shine to those who appreciate it. Don't be so wordy when there's no need. Your article is in para-list format, so be brief and to the point.

Remember, Bbeing popular is overrated. You don’t have to be the “who’s who” everyone is talking about. Do you really want rumors going around about you? Ones that probably aren’t true? People will judge and not want to talk about you. May not, don't generalise or assume - you'll alienate your audience. (Jessica Schwartz HELLO!) No need to ever negative-reference or take a stab at anyone in a Non-Fiction tips piece. Ever. I'd remove it. nobody will want to talk to you unless they know the real you, because that’s what you want people to talk about, not the rumor you. Good point.

Don’t care! Do you really care what people think? The only reason you would care is if you were trying to prove yourself to somebody. You shouldn’t have to change to impress people if its not the real you. Don’t give a shit about your social status. The swear word works perfectly here, usually I'd discourage it. But good judgement. People can think whatever they want but you know the real you.

Amazing! This was really eye opening and really interesting to read, thanks for posting! I don't have anything bad to say!

I think what you wrote here is very correct and your advice to high school students is very helpful since it is based on your own experiences. there isn't much i can comment on because your composition delivered the message you wanted to give to the reader. Keep up the good effort! And you are right, everyone should read this, especially high school students.
i agree with you on the 'don't care' part and i think everything you said in your piece of poetry is valuable.