Young Writers Society

Hey there litsnowflake. It's just lizzy dropping by real quick, so without a further ado, let the reviewing begin.

Come read about my short poem on Groot! whooooo!!

There were quite a few lines and sentences that would fit into my grammar, spelling, and typos category. Most of them occurred within the paragraph in the quote below.

so here is a little poem I had to write in my creative writing class. I guess its a sound poem not really sure if I did it correctly. We were told to grab inspiration from an art gallery in my college. There was this tree like sculpture that caught my eye. It looked just like Groot from Guardians of the Galaxy haha. So that is what I chose to write the poem about. BUT instead of being all basic I changed up Groot's character and turned him into a Jamaican Groot Tree LOL. Just a little taste of the things I come up with.

-The "s" in "so" needs to be capitalized. I don't like it when authors start sentences with "so", it just seems way too casual and not the presentation you're looking for. I would just scrap the "so" and leave the "here". Starting with "Here" gives the same meaning and much better presentation.

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so here is a little poem I had to write in my creative writing class.

I would either reword this or ditch it completely and start from scratch. This gives your poem a really bad look because it sounds like you really hate writing. It just adds a bad tint to the piece and really hurts it. You could say something like this for a more positive feeling.

Here is a little poem I wrote for my creative writing class.

This version is much nicer and gives a better presentation than the other one.

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I guess its a sound poem not really sure if I did it correctly.

There needs to be an apostrophe in "it's". I don't really like the sound of this sentence anyways because you are doubting yourself. You are taking away all of the confidence away from the poem by telling the readers right off the bat that you are doubting your ability at writing a poem.

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It looked just like Groot from Guardians of the Galaxy haha. So that is what I chose to write the poem about.

Get rid of the "haha" at the end of the sentence. This is another thing that doesn't make the poem look very good. The second sentence separate doesn't look good by itself. You may want to try merging these two sentences together.

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BUT instead of being all basic I changed up Groot's character and turned him into a Jamaican Groot Tree LOL. Just a little taste of the things I come up with.

Never use all caps for emphasis. Use bold or italics or color but never use all caps. Don't scream your message at the reader just to draw them towards it, that will only drive them away. Also refrain from using any emoticons or slang or anything like that in pieces. Though it's realistic it's yet another thing that drives readers away.

Okay now that I can get past the grammar, spelling and typos, I can get onto the rest of my review but before I can talk about content I have to cover your formatting. You must have copied and pasted this over from another document because the lines aren't split quite right. Notice the three lines in the quote below.

Mi scratch mi tree booty, mi branches are droopy. Swish,

crack, snap, dash, spree. The king of the forest, I-man Jamaican

Groot Tree.

I think they were meant to be more like this.

Mi scratch mi tree booty, mi branches are droopy.
Swish, crack, snap, dash, spree.
The king of the forest, I-man Jamaican.

If the lines were supposed to be split like that on purpose sorry I didn't see it. If not, you might want to fix that formatting as soon as possible.

Being a very huge Marvel (among other fandoms) fan it's nice to see fandom poems come up every once and awhile. The point of the poem is pretty straight forward and I don't have any comments for it. I actually wrote a series of fandom poems so I know the emotion that goes into them.

Well that's about all I have for this review. Sorry if I couldn't be of anymore help to you or give any more advice. If you have any questions about this review or anything else, feel free to PM me.
Lizzy
The Queen of the Book Clubs