Music

I think that 'a day of light' (in the second line) sounds a bit awkward. I found myself mistaking if for 'the light of day' and rereading it. And the 'truth' of the sun? I'm curious to know what you meant by that. Energy makes sense... but truth?... I don't know. And the last three lines:
"our veins still flowed
quietly yet successfully [you misspelled this, just letting you know...]
of the music"
Now, about those last lines... the idea of what you're attempting to say sounds beautiful; But, 'our veins still flowed quietly and successfully OF the music' doesn't sound right. The "of" part doesn't sound right. I would have used the word 'with' instead of 'of'. It makes more sense to me...
All in all, it was a nice poem, and I enjoyed reading it. It has great potential!

~Ingrid

I love this! It is the most beautiful and truthful piece I have read yet! You're very talented(:

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I'm very suprised ! I thought this was gonna be a flow nightmare because all the lines were either really long or short but it actually flowed real well! Nice and smooth and I really felt like the poem it self was a work of muical genuis in its own way. I really feel you captured that feeling quite accuratley in this poem

I was going to say that you might need some punctuation, but it works without and flows as smoothly as it can be. Good job!

Beautifully done my dear.

Hey!

I'm very suprised ! I thought this was gonna be a flow nightmare because all the lines were either really long or short but it actually flowed real well! Nice and smooth and I really felt like the poem it self was a work of muical genuis in it's own way. Being a band geek and soon to play two insturments I know how music can really moive you and change you and I really feel you captured that feeling quite accuratley in this poem

Keep it up
~Kat