Published November 24, 2012
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Wow, for the simplicity of this piece, it is so great! Each line flowed well to the next, and the topic was perfect for this kind of poem.
It's great ow you incorporated the feeling of love at first sight. We all know what that feels like. 
It gives the reader a sense that they know exactly what you're life is like at the moment, and I find that really cool!
Great work!
Hey! I like this, it's cute and I totally get the love at first sight feeling. It is, as they said, short but sweet
in the last line I would say "and as for my heart" instead. Obviously you don't have to go with that, it just sounds better to me personally.
Short but still great. You could add one more line though, to help the last line flow better. But it was really good and actually I probably have no idea what I'm talking about. But anyway, you did really good, keep writing.
short but sweet,..
=)