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by lele253isme

Published July 26, 2011

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LiesOnLies
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LiesOnLies wrote a review Review · Jul 30, 2011

This was pretty well written, but I kind of would like to know why the person has all of these emotions. It's really vague as to why this person feels this way. Perhaps, I missed something, but it just seems that someone is randomly saying they will not hideaway again...but from what?

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VuzzyCat
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VuzzyCat wrote a review Review · Jul 26, 2011

This is a really good poem! I love the message it sends. And I didn't see anything wrong with it. Good job! My favorite part was the entire last verse. It seemed to flow so smoothly. I love it!!! Keep writing!

No more
Hiding away
No more
Changing me
no more
having fear
No more
No more
No more
Tears

DrunkOnWriting wrote a review Review · Jul 26, 2011

Beautiful, powerful lyrics, saturated with emotion. I really loved this!

Grey clouds, move away now
Clear skies, peace at mind
No regrets, no forgets


my favorite part :) It was pure poetry. Unfortunately, I can't really find much wrong here :)



I like nonsense, it wakes up the brain cells. Fantasy is a necessary ingredient in living, it's a way of looking at life through the wrong end of a telescope. Which is what I do, and that enables you to laugh at life's realities.
— Dr. Seuss