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Wow, nice. Very deep and you must have thought long and hard to make this. Is it based on you? Because if it is, then well done, I could maybe do I poem about me, but it would probably have Jedward written all over it.

Anyway, this is very well done, you do have a few mistakes in there, but I'm being nice and can't be bothered to pick them out. Maybe another day, I guess.

:D this poem is awesome It's really good I love your pieces x

Hi Lele! Well, I sure liked it. It was really interesting, kinda confusing, but nevertheless, interesting. However, you did have quite a few grammatical mistakes, and I'm going to point those out.

If someone asks me,"Are you Lele?"
I'll probably deny and say,"I am not she comma or period here"
I'll probably deny that I encourage self esteem
And that I cut the seams
That bound unfollowed dreams

I'll say,"I'm not her period here"
I don't live in my own world
I don't ask for more
From those who have given me less

I don't break rules
Or show the smarts that make fools
I don't train those who are cruel
No, I am not she

That someone will say comma here
"Well, you both have the same face
And the same traits
Yes, you must be her period here"

And I'll look them in the eye
And I'll conjure up a lie
But, I am sure that they can see by now

But, still I must try
So I brace myself to deny
The only thing I have half died from 'have half died' just sounds.. odd. Reword this.
So I take a deep breath
I push away the stress
And say with a pressured look " backspace this so the quotation marks are against the 'I". I am she period here"

This is good, I like it

There are some really lovely poetic lines here. They show a lot of skill.

I think my favourite is


"I don't train those who are cruel
No, I am not she"

And the use of dialogue in here really added to the poem. I think it can be a really hard thing to do.

So good job.

I think it's an amazing poem, with something that everyone can understand.
I know that I've tried to be someone else to please others.
Thanks for writing it!

Hehehehe. I like this poem. Its really nice, rhythmic, and totally understandable. Great job

Written here, come to give you a review

Alright, once reading your poem I could understand what you meant by having to deny everything you stand up for just because some other person doesn't agree and you don't exactly want to seem petty by standing up for something they don't agree with.

Really, I didn't see much wrong with this poem but there are a few things that I noticed.

And that I cut the seems << Right there, seems would be seams
That bound unfollowed dreams

If someone asks me," Are you Lele?"
I'll probably deny and say,"I am not she"
I'll probably deny that I encourage self esteem<< This line throws me off -

what do you mean that you don't encourage self-esteem?

I don't break rules
Or show the smarts that make fools
I don't train those who are cruel
No, I am not she

This is about when you deny all you stand up for just to please other people.