Hi layla_danielle13,
Mailice here with a short review!
First of all, welcome here on YWS. I hope you like it here!
I immediately noticed the title, which I like very much. I also like your story very much. It's very beautiful, full of figurative depictions and seems like a woolly-warm dream itself, which you only have pale in front of you in the morning before it fades away.
You use very great descriptions and phrases to portray the dream as something tangible yet fragile. You also use the presentation of the text to make some passages stand out. Certainly the whole text could be rewritten to the point where it could become a poem.
And as the boy watched his friend finally slip into the vivid world of false realities and forgotten truths, he wanted nothing more than to be explored.
I think this is the passage I like the most and where I can interpret the most. Precisely because it speaks of a "vivid world", I first assumed that it was a lucid dream, but "vivid" can also be stretched to mean reality, and the friend is just waking up from a coma or a dream to confront the falseness of society.
I find the last part of the sentence very interesting, not only because of my previous interpretation of it as part of modern society, where the media partly dominates people and doesn't always reveal the truth, but also to the philosophical context that man knows everything as soon as he is born. He knows about everything from the past and has memories of things he never experienced, and yet he has forgotten them.
The only criticism I can think of is why it is so short?

Anyway, still have fun here on YWS and enjoy your writing!
Mailice.
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