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When The Grail Should Be Filled

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WHEN THE GRAIL SHOULD BE FILLED

Being a forgotten chapter from the epic PARZIVAl

And when he had been handed the grail and led to the great hall, where the Fisher King, now healed, cut his meat and smiled upon him, Parzival was asked what he should like to drink. In the hall were many fine tonics and cordials made of fruits that grew only in that land. But Parzival, having fought so hard to fulfil his quest, thought no earthly drink was fit for the grail. And it was known throughout the land that he who drank from the grail would be granted great contentment, eternal youth, and relief from all mortal wounds. But to achieve such blessings one must drink. And Parzival would not drink.

The Fisher King sent for rich brews of molten gold and cultured honey, but Parzival would not drink. He sent for wines older than the first Fisher King himself, but Parzival refused them. Finally, the Fisher King’s daughter made herself known to Parzival and asked if there was anything he would have.

“Aye, lady,” Parzival replied. “There is something.”

“My lord, pray tell its name and I will fetch it.”

“I fear it is not something you can fetch. I would drink the universe.”

Then the maiden was frightened, for she had never heard such a request. But she resolved to try. That same evening, she set out upon her mare, and climbed a mountain that was so tall it brushed the heavens. And when she had reached the top, she took her pitcher and filled it with a little of the universe. Then she returned to the hall and presented it to Parzival.

“My lord, I have here your drink of choice,” she said.

“You are a fine woman,” the knight replied, and he lifted the grail. She poured the universe within and he drank.

It was then that a great change occurred. For the universe tasted like nothing Parzival had tried before. It tasted like the warmth of distant suns on distant lands, and the distant lives of distant people. When he had finished, he was still thirsty. And he was not greatly content, or eternally young, or healed from all wounds.

“Woman,” he said, “You must fetch me more. For I have tasted the universe, but only just.”

From then on, the lady fetched and fetched, pouring the universe from pitcher to grail until Parzival became so drunk the stars were now suns. The Fisher King watched unhappily, for it pained him to see his daughter reduced to an errand girl. Finally, he pulled her aside.

“Daughter,” he said. “You must stop this foolishness. You are doing the man no good. He lives more in dreams than he does this world. Your pitcher brings him poison.”

His daughter was stubborn, at first. But when Parzival called her name, thumping the grail on the table and yelling that there was still more to taste, she knew he was right. She set out, but she did not climb the mountain. Instead, she filled her pitcher at a nearby stream. Then she returned to the hall and poured it into the grail. All at once, his complexion cleared and he smiled.

“This is the best taste of the universe I have had so far,” said he.

“I am glad,” the lady replied. “But sir, you should know that I have tricked you. It is only from the stream.”

Then Parzival was silent, and the suns had become stars one more. At last he spoke.

“So it may be, but it is still the best taste I have had.”

From that moment on, Parzival was granted the contentment, youth and health that had been spoke of in legend. Because he was wont to return to Arthur’s court, the Fisher King adorned him in fine brocade and sent him on his way with a procession of men bearing various gifts. And yet it was later said, by the men of the procession, that Parzival had them make camp on the banks of the stream from whence the lady had filled her pitcher, whereupon he drank again and remarked that it was just as good as before. And then he stood staring down at the water, and in its reflection he could see the multitude of stars that he had longed to visit. But, as the men tell, this did not make Parzival unhappy. He only smiled, and remarked that it was the best view of the universe he had ever had. The next morning, he continued on to Arthur’s court, but that is another story.

As for the lady, she never did marry, but took the role of a dutiful daughter and saw her father to his old age. At times she would return to the mountain, but her pitcher would not fill now that the grail had gone away. She settled to watch the stars, and drink from the stream in a regular goblet, and be as content as she could. Such is the lot of ordinary folk. We mimic the greats, but we are not them.

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Hi there lalarosealie! Lim here with a review.

I Googled ‘Parzival’ for context in reading the story - your writing does sound very much like it could be from an chivalric Arthurian romance, from what I know of those kinds of tales. I like that the Fisher King’s daughter becomes the unexpected protagonist of this chapter, and the idea of drinking the universe and becoming intoxicated by it is super intriguing.

Something I like about your writing is how you’ve managed to fit the style and genre of a medieval romance without making it sound overly archaic or hard to read. I especially am impressed by your dialogue:

“My lord, pray tell its name and I will fetch it.”


The use of “my lord” and “pray” rather than “please” helps locate the conversation in its setting but is still understandable to the modern reader.

Something to think about is whether you need to explicitly say the meaning of the story in the last sentence. Is that a convention for the rest of Parzival? Maybe it’s just me, but I feel like I’d prefer not to be told outright the message the story conveys (I like to figure things out on my own or let the be ambiguous), but it could make sense if you are trying to write to a genre where that’s always how it’s done.

I also kind of wondered why the Fisher King’s daughter decided to get involved - I know stories from historical eras of literature don’t always go as much into character motivation as contemporary stories do, but when reading I wished I had a bit more insight into what made her help out, even if it’s just in one line.

Back to something else I like about your writing - your narrative voice! Even though this is a short story, you’ve managed to add in really evocative imagery.

That same evening, she set out upon her mare, and climbed a mountain that was so tall it brushed the heavens.


I like how fantastical the idea of a mountain ‘brushing’ the heavens is. It kind of puts into my mind the idea that this world is the world of a painting.

It was then that a great change occurred. For the universe tasted like nothing Parzival had tried before. It tasted like the warmth of distant suns on distant lands, and the distant lives of distant people. When he had finished, he was still thirsty. And he was not greatly content, or eternally young, or healed from all wounds.


I really liked the rhythm of this paragraph. The narration is really rhythmic, especially with the repetition of “distant” there.

Overall, this was an excellent story, with a consistent and engaging voice. I guess the main idea you might consider if you work on it more or work on similar stories would be how far you want to expand beyond the original genre (in this case Arthurian romance), for example by giving more time to particular characters and their internal thoughts or perhaps adding ambiguity, or if you’d rather stick to the conventions.

Keep writing!
-Lim

Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the deranged S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - Parzival won’t drink anything that is offered to him and instead, drinks the universe. But the taste of the universe drives him crazy, he can’t handle it. The lady gives him a drink of the stream and by then, he is grounded in reality.

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I have no recommendations to make as if right now, but if you wish to edit it, then you may.

Chocolate Bar - I loved how the universe was described as tasting nothing like Parzival has imagined, because he becomes so tantalized with the taste of the universe that he loses himself along the road. But then, my other favorite part was how the lady went down to the stream to help him, for she saw that he was a dreamer and didn’t want him to get too far cast away.

Closing Graham Cracker - Parzival learned that he doesn’t need to drink the universe to know the stars and went to rule on well. The lady may have never married and had stayed in her home with her father, but she has the deep love in her heart that expands and in that sense, she is magic.

I wish you a wonderful day/night! ^v^



"Come quickly, I am drinking the stars!"
— Dom Pérignon