Published May 26, 2010
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forgive me everyone,i just wanted to let you know it wasnt a poem it was simply a prose. But i chose to post it in the dramatic poetry section. Again please forgive me! It wasnt meant to be read as a poem. I should have written that in the beginning.
I tried to read this, but I couldn't because the formatting made my head hurt. Everything was just lumped together into one mass of letters. It didn't help that the punctuation was not grammatically correct or that the spacing was nonexistent. Formatting has a huge impact on how your poem is received, and right now, the formatting is not at all friendly. I suggest you go back through and reformat this so it's at least readable; right now, it is not at all reader-friendly.
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Um, maybe there's a problem with your computer?
Anyways, I will be honest and say that I did not feel any emotion in this poem. It was as if I was reading a bunch of words with no feeling and just for the sake of it. I did grasp though what you were going for. I liked how you used the notes of the piano and the violin and in general, the components of the song to try and describe the feeling; I think it was very creative of you. But still, there was no real motive behind them. Maybe it's a wrong choice of words. But that's just me so, keep writing.