Tell me something I don't know,
I am not perfect: nor are you.
Tell me you hate me,
though it's obvious that you do.
Make me suffer,
my pain is enough for you.
Fill the room with my feelings,
I promise the darkness will cover all.
You've ruined me,
am I nothing then ?
Yes I can agree,
shred my heart until all anger beings to consume me-
And smile as I suffer.
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Hi Kitrosemon13! Well, what Ace said ... I'll just fix a couple things up.
You don't need the space before the question mark.
I absolutely love how powerful this last line is! They're just five words, but they knock you off your feet. Nice work!
Hi there! I loved the last line of your poem. Very eerie and darkish. Just a couple tiny things...
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I really like the idea of this poem. It's something everyone can relate to. It's deep and meaningful and it shouldn't be expressed so simply. Try to make it longer and you'll have a beautiful poem.
PM me if you do, I'd love to review :]
-Ace