Published July 30, 2010
Open doors: shattered windows,
Careless whispers fill the pillars.
Here we are together,
with each other thats all we need.
Find yourself,
take your time.
Love yourself,
I'll be fine.
Way out across the field,
I hear someone cry out.
I wonder who it is and why.
Could it be someone who needs....
Find yourself,
take your time.
Love yourself,
I'll be fine.
Never having to worry,
about what they'll say,
never have to remember bad days.
All the sorrow I had is gone,
I found myself...in your arms.
And I'll find myself,
I'll take my time,
I'll love myself,
I'll be fine if I just believe in myself and time.
I'll break away,
far away high above air and space,
you won't miss me I swear.
'Cause you'll be here....and I'll be there.
Break away,
take your time,
I wish the best, you'll be fine.
Fill my heart with joy.
I'll be fine....
With myself and time.
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Good Job!!! I can't see some errors or typos. All I can say is outstanding! Keep it up!
Time is GOLD! hehe!
Always,
Vir
yup this is definitely a keeper !!
good job
there area few places where it didn't flow as well as it could have but other than that i really like the theme !
great job keep up the awesomeness
~Adeera~
Gee! What a poem.. Hehehe... Great!!
Hey there! This was very good. I really enjoyed reading this, there was one point in the poem where, it wasn't bad, but it seemed awkward,
The words in red rhyme, and that creates some form of "rhythm" when I read it, and it didn't fit with the poems overall flow. So it was awkward to read. Other than that I really liked this! Keep it up!
I loved this. It defines emotions most people want to feel. I really like this!