Genie In A Bottle

The first question I feel compelled to ask is: do you, or do you not, have a rhyme scheme? I'm guessing no, so I suggest that you rewrite the lines that rhyme so that they don't rhyme; right now, their rhyming disrupts the flow of the poem.

Overall, while I liked the twist at the end, I felt that this poem was too simple. There's no imagery, and nothing that makes it stand out as really poetic. You also had a couple of lines (like the second) that just didn't make sense. I suggest that you expand this poem a bit, incorporate more imagery into it, and make it a touch more poetic. Just make sure that all your imagery is concrete and specific, and that it's tied together and to the main point of the poem.

Hey there!

I really like the idea of this--a poem about a genie. And the third wish is awesome. Definitely Aladdin-ish, but it made me smile nonetheless. And your ideas are pretty firm, which is great.

Like anything, it could use work, but hopefully I can help you a little with it.

Give me three wishes,
I know you cannot deny.

Take me to a room of lights,
and food and drinks of all delight.#800080 "> >>Just sort of wondering why this rhymes, and the rest doesn't?

Shoot me towards the moon, #800080 ">>>I like the emphasis here; "shoot," rather than "fly" or something like that. It paints a good picture.
so I can see the stars.
So lovely as you are, Genie.

Do you think we could go to Mars?#800080 "> >>You have a bit of internal rhyming here; it matches with "stars." But this and the other instances of it are strangely-spaced. It's a bit odd, so maybe try to make it more consistent?
I haven't wished for anything yet.
So I think I shall begin.

I wish for no war,
death has become a pain.
Take this wish of mine and make it into reality. #800080 ">>>This is a somewhat long sentence and throws off the flow a bit. Perhaps you could say something like, "Take this wish and make it so," or something.

I wish for health to all my family to come. #800080 ">>>The other two wishes have more description to them, but this is a sentence by itself. Expand a bit?

Now for my final wish, I know it's coming to a close.
I know you think I'd wish for more wishes,
but there is one thing that I know.
I want you to be free,
away from people like me,
from people who want things daily.#800080 "> >>This is a pretty stanza right now, but it halts a little. You have the internal rhyming with the first and third lines, and then the last three all rhyme with each other. That's fine, but that coupled with, I guess the wording, makes it a little off. You could try to make it flow more. I'm sorry, I don't really have much of a suggestion for it, other than to say just play around a little.

So now I bid you farewell,
I know you cannot deny.

Give me three wishes. #800080 ">>>I like how you come back to "Give me three wishes." You did it well so that it's not annoyingly repetitive, and it fits. Bravo!