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My Forever Dream

May 30, 2012
Poetry
Romantic

My Forever Dream

Sidus Levis - Kite

I'd go to sleep every single day,

And I'd begin to dream every single night,

Hoping within that dream I might,

Begin to spend it with you today.

If I do dream of you,

I'd want to sleep till eternity,

for in that illusion you'd be my reality,

just you and me; it'll be so true.

I'd be hoping to keep on sleeping,

for when I do awake from slumber,

I'd remember that we were never together,

that in fact, would be my utmost reaping.

Now as I return once again into my deep slumber,

I'd be awaiting our moment forever,

Be it dream or not, you'd always be,

My forever after.

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roxyask

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roxyask commented · Wed May 30, 2012 7:21 pm

Love! <3

NewAtThis

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NewAtThis wrote a review · Wed May 30, 2012 11:21 am

Very vivid, I like this a lot. I could imagine everything. I love how you made it rhyme too.

I'd be hoping to keep on sleeping,
for when I do awake from slumber,
I'd remember that we were never together,
that in fact, would be my utmost reaping.

That was my favorite, very deep and i could feel the emotion.

keep it up. A lot of potential.

NewAtThis

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NewAtThis wrote a review · Wed May 30, 2012 9:39 am

Very vivid, I like this alot.

Nargles

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Nargles commented · Wed May 30, 2012 8:44 am

this is really good and I enjoyed it. I liked the rhyme and the way it flowed. Good job

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