Published November 7, 2007
[pre]"Metal Sheets"
Silver slits sheets,
Sheets upon which
She sits. Sorrowly
Sweating shadowed crimson
Stains. Sanely shedding
Slipping slowly shivering
Soaked in sticky slimy
Stuff. So sad
And slit upon which
She stops suddenly
Seeing a certain shady
Stranger she sorrowly
Sought seeking a
Straight path. She
Slips on her smelly
Stinky socks and slides
Majestically through the
Silent shadows
Smiling sorrowly through
Solitary sacred sanity.[/pre]
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Yea can u figure out what silver was doing?
Good job. It's a bit of a tongue twister, I even stumbled over a few words.
THANKS!!! IM SOO HAPPY I LOVE TOO WRITE!
this is very good, i like how you wrote the poem with mostly S's. very different. there is no way i could come up with something using one letter of the alphabet. i really like this.
kim
wow...thats a lot of S's...how the heck do you right alterations? I can't figure it out.
-bobiscool134
Wow another great poem! I just love your work Kazie! Keep up the good work!