Hello there Kay! (I hope I got your name right because that's what it says on your user hehe)
Well, I just want to say --- good job at your first attempt on writing rhyming poems! It wa s a pretty nice one so far don't worry
"All I ever wanted was to spread joy
To all kinds of people, loud and coy"
That introduction was my favorite part of this piece, to be honest. Those statements made it seem like there's a whole lot more in the poem. The writing sounded like someone confused, it sounded like someone trying to find a place in this world. And if your goal was to make the readers feel that way --- then congratulations because you have done it successfully! Keep writing, I know you'll get better at it
Points: 841
Reviews: 5
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