Published August 24, 2011
Run, 'Lissa, Run!
Tell your father what has happened.
Run, 'Lissa, Run!
Put on your baby shoes.
Run, 'Lissa, Run!
Don't ever look back!
Run, 'Lissa, Run!
Run, 'Lissa, Run!
Hurry, your mother is dying,
Run, 'Lissa, Run!
Only stop to buy water.
Run, 'Lissa, Run!
Don't sit there crying!
Run, dear one, Run!
Run, 'Lissa, Run!
Move your feet as never before.
Run, 'Lissa, Run!
Never stop trying.
Run, 'Lissa, Run!
Don't ever look back!!!
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I love the receptiveness in the poem, because even the though the emotion changes the underlying theme doesn't. This is a poem you can read again and again gaining new meaning every time! Short, sweet and meaningful! Beautiful stanza structure! Wish you had one more stanza relating to the Lissa's body language. What I got out of this poem is society's pressure to keep covering imperfects and running away from problems. It is beautifully written, never stop writing!
hi there,just want to say you did a wonderful job on this narrative poem. the way it's telling her what to do as you're in anticipation to read the next line.
#GoodJob
I really liked this one. It's quite entertaining. Its sweet and short. I don't think there's anything wrong with what you've written. I like the line,
I also liked the fact that you used it as your title, as well as a repetitive line in your poem. It was a good idea to do so. I like the use of the exclamation mark at the end. It keeps the reader thrilled or full of excitement. The flow was good and you kept a nice rhythm. I'd say, good job and keep it up.