I've a mind I've a soul
More or less equal to all
I thought this morning looking out of pane,
Why ethics and morals are not always same.
Hurry to condemn ready to blame,
all in name of Almighty without a shame.
Saints becoming Satan,
and phony in every humane.
But still I say,
I've a mind I've a soul,
I can see clearly it’s a foul.
You can see through these eyes,
the pain its hiding deep inside.
You ignore them; want them out of your sight,
merely a look would make you feel plight.
So obsessed with scenario, we just decide,
what is wrong and what is right.
And here I say,
I've a mind I've a soul,
I've MY vision which can never be stole.
Bright enough to enlighten a shrine,
Dark enough to futile a divine.
I am man with freewill;
To tell apart the good and the evil.
I assimilate, I accept, I ponder, I wonder,
To dive down with flock,
Or to drove against the odd.
Because I know,
I’ve a mind I’ve a soul;
I am my grief, I am console.
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Wow, this is great.
I really don't have anything "bad" to say. I love the way this is written. There is so much depth to this piece. This piece is so well written that the reader is always attentive. This poem definitely caused me to think differently that I usually do, and I really liked that. It starts off almost story like and that's what grabbed my attention. Your voice was strong throughout the piece, which is fantastic and not an easy thing to do!
I can't wait to see more of your writing!
~FearlessLove4
thanks..
I thought that this was very deep and so well written, it makes me believe this is how you truly feel.
I really like how this line is repeated, making up different sections that flow smoothly together.
I thought these two lines where beautifully written and how you worked with a "ying-yang" if you know what I mean (working with opposites.)
I really enjoyed reading this! You did really well, in my opinion. Thank you for dealing with my crap. XD
thank you!! thanks for reading and your opinion