Young Writers Society

Wow, this is great.

I really don't have anything "bad" to say. I love the way this is written. There is so much depth to this piece. This piece is so well written that the reader is always attentive. This poem definitely caused me to think differently that I usually do, and I really liked that. It starts off almost story like and that's what grabbed my attention. Your voice was strong throughout the piece, which is fantastic and not an easy thing to do!

I can't wait to see more of your writing!

~FearlessLove4

I thought that this was very deep and so well written, it makes me believe this is how you truly feel.

I've a mind I've a soul

I thought this morning looking out of pane, Why ethics and morals are not always same. Hurry to condemn ready to blame, all in name of Almighty without a shame.
Saints becoming Satan, and phony in every humane. But still I say, I've a mind I've a soul [/qutoe]

I will say I did get a little confused here. You talk about yourself, then talk about others, and then about yourself again, and the jumping around makes the connection unclear. I may just be blind, but that's how I felt, and when confusion like this happens at the beginning of a work, it can make the rest of the reading difficult.

Bright enough to enlighten a shrine, Dark enough to futile a divine.