Chapter 3 part 1
Jimmi: Hello? are you okay?
John: let me handle this, are you okay mister?
Mister: what? oh yeah im fine im just pretending to be injured cuz the huns don't attack people that are already injured
Professor: Ha Ha i love my chicken patty
Jimmi: uh prof? thats a cactus
Prof: this is a pointy chicken patty
shyrl:.....
John: ok lets get on with our journey
Mister: what journey?
Jimmi OH let me tell him, well u see our intelligent leader.....
3 hours later
Mister: wow ur pretty much a dumbass
John: shut up
Mister: k since u guys are all complete morons, ill help you defeat the dragon
Jimmi: i dont think we can acept that help
John: y not
Jimmi: cuz i dont want to kill some random guy that accidently got involved
John: fine we'll find out his name, then he wont dbe random
Jimmi: fine whats your name
Mister: Leif, my name is leif
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i didnt have much time to write this part, cuz it was during my lunch so i thought id work on it, i kinda just sped through without looking it over
You wrote this in a chat room didn't you?
There are too many spelling and grammatical errors to fit. In thirty seconds, let me see what I can do.
Ur=Your.
cuz=Because
y=why
im=I'm
lets=let's
i=I
whats=what's
k=okay
And many more.
This story should really have quotation marks to indicate dialogue, not colons. You can get away with it for scripts, but scripts are even more structured than novels (albeit in a different way.)
rather short. POst more. I really do enjoy your writing. Really amuses me!