Chapter One-Not Gifted

by justletgo

Published August 26, 2012

In Don't Play With Fire

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I feel stupid. Really stupid waiting for my idiot brothers to get out of the bank. My Patience for them is thinning fast when I hear the sirens.

You would think, that my brothers (seventeen and up) who grew up in a family full of crime and criminals, would remember even the simplest rule of robbing a bank. Get everyone away from the desks.

I jump back into the van and then take off down the block just as the cops stop in front of the bank. They are on their own for getting out. I sigh and lean my head against the steering wheel of the huge white van, my friend, Kayt let me use. My brothers are truly, the dumbest of dumbasses.

"Harlem, Stop daydreaming about Taylor Lautner and open the damn doors!" Caleb yells and gives the back doors a good kick.

Automatically, I open the doors and Lucas swings open the driver's side door. There's a cigarette dangling from his lips, sweat is on his forehead. "Still daydreaming, Princess? Move."

I'm not of the seat yet when he starts to move in. Caleb sits in the passenger seat while Parker and I sit behind them. the sirens are still going off, loud and wild in my ears.

Lucas starts the engine, moving out of the spot I parked in and drives off in the opposite direction of the police. The area in front of the bank is surrounded by police cars, who are already out and ready to start shooting. They were smarter than I thought.

"We're not idiots, Har," Caleb says without looking at me. I guess he saw the look on my face from before. Lucas has his eyes on the road, watching everything that is going on around him while, Parker has a thick wad of cash in his hands.

I ignore Caleb and look out the window of course they weren't. Our parents taught them better than to be idiots. Of course.

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"Bags?" My father asks.

"Seventeen," Lucas replies.

"Any trouble?"

Caleb shakes his head, "in and out, real quick."

My mother crossed her legs and watches the TV. My dad and brothers are in the kitchen, trying to keep their voices low (too bad they suck at it).

"What did-" my dad starts.

"She only watched the car," Lucas reassures him. They're talking about me.

Mom puts a hand on my knee and squeezes. She did it out of pity, I told myself. Which is partly true. Dad doesn't trust me. It took a lot of convincing for him just to let me go to the bank (just to watch the stupid van).

It's because I'm a girl, I kept telling myself. But it's more than that, it's the fact that they were older, stronger, and all around better than I am.

"It has nothing to do with that, baby," my mom says softly. I grit my teeth and think about dead puppies. She laughs which only gets my cheeks to feel warm. Mom loves to meddle in our lives, and with her gift of being a Listener, it's even easier for her to do that.

"Yes it is," I protest. Because I know that it's true. "It's because I don't have a gift. It's because I'm not gifted."

She's silent for a while. Which tells me that I have the right answer. Their voices in the kitchen are too loud, a chorus of three different voices all talking, smirking, and laughing. Sometimes, I really do hate my family.

I hate the way they all look at me like I'm some sort of outsider (which I am).

Lucas is a manipulator, Caleb's a transporter, Parker can speak and raise the dead with a quick thought, my mother is a Listener, and my father is a transformer. I shake my head as mom opens her mouth, ready to plead her case. I get up and open the front door, slamming it hard behind me. 

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FRStevens Review
FRStevens wrote a review Review · Aug 28, 2012

I like it. I love how people have talents and I really felt for the girl when she expressed her feelings about being an 'outsider' to the family due to her lack of a gift.

Very impressive. I am most definitely looking forward to your next chapter.

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flossybunny wrote a review Review · Aug 26, 2012

I really enjoyed this piece of writing actually! I love how you've managed to completely immerse the reader in narrator's world from the very beginning. I thought it was also a good idea not to throw the 'gifts' thing in at the very start, it was good to be able to see the narrator in their own environment before adding another layer. You've not only made your characters intriguing but you've also made the story itself interesting which I think is what you need for a good story. It does need to be proof read but other than that I would love to read the next chapter!

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amandahladik wrote a review Review · Aug 26, 2012

I want more! This was a great beginning to the story. The point of view of the "girl" was very insightful to her inner thoughts. You get to really understand her feelings about her family, and it was very easy to make a connection to her. Her father's distrust due to her gender, the history of crime and criminals and the special powers of the family does give the plot a lot of interest. The sexist father and the mother remind of a short story I read. Boys and Girls by Alice Munroe. Your passion for writing is as clear as black and white when I read this, you are very talented. I can not wait for a Chapter Two.



I like to create sympathy for my characters, then set the monsters loose.
— Stephen King