Go Well (or Dead Friends)

by joshuapaul

Published December 4, 2011

Spoiler! :
The first poem I have written. Something of a free-write at that.


.......Bread broken
by hands as dry as the cowboys lunge,
and later they hold
quiet good byes
over a cold ear.

For veins of wine,
the grifter's fallacy
belongs beneath the glitter of
phosphorus, where treacherous words
escape like bats from a cave.

And the audience gawk
the rorschach fleet
swirling against the moon;
the black sky heaves and crawls,
steeped in unholy metaphor.



.......Good byes don't hurt,
not like I'm sorry.
God knows I've uttered a few.

Like when I learnt
that breath can be forced
into dead lungs

and the metronome
thumped from hibernation,
but that doesn't matter any more.

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ladymarmalade commented Comment · Dec 4, 2011

Really makes you think. I had to read it once or twice to grasp exactly what you were trying to say, but I understand it fully by the end. great description and nice smooth flow with words. Altogether excellent!

camronmarshall wrote a review Review · Dec 4, 2011

Got your message and logged on immediately. You may not see this so I will email you my thoughts on the poem. Though I suspect this poem may be something of an anomaly. You've got my email ;)



You are in the wrong land even if the roosters recognize you.
— Nathalie Handal, "Noir, une lumière"