Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language, violence, and mature content.
Before we get started I wanna say that you should go read it on AO3.
And I want to put some warnings before you begin reading.
This is a Larry Stylinson Fanfiction. Harry Styles + Louis Tomlinson.
There will be gay smut in later chapters.
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As I was scrolling I noticed Harry and Louis's names and immediately was interested. I'm very intrigued with this story. As I was reading it I noticed a few things. First off in about the second paragraph where it starts "Louis been" that should be changed to Louis's with the apostrophe s. I did also notice that it switched POV's often from first to second and that can be kind of confusing for the reader so try and make it just a bit clearer maybe by saying Louis thinks or something like that. Also at "realized his trip was going to be bad-- which send him into panic mode" should be which sent him into panic mode. Again another change "A dark blue button up with hears all over it" I'm assuming you meant "hearts". Other than those few things I like where this story is going. I can't wait to read more so please update me when you can, thanks!
--GossipGirl
Where exactly did it change POV's? Thanks for the response, means a lot. x
Hi!
I'm interested to read your novel, because of what you said about blogs... but... I'm not sure what this is, other than a warning of what you're chapter's will have in the future. I came in here expecting to read a chapter about blogs or something, but instead I'm just confused.
Where is the chapter? Surely this isn't it! If you just wanted to warn us about the contents, you could have simply had an Authors Note at the beginning. You have the right idea about rating your work, though, so good for you.
I also don't understand the tagging... you don't mean users... is this a way of saying: Beware there will be all this stuff in it??
Well, let me know!
There's a link at the top that says "AO3". And yes, the tags are what's going to be in later chapters. Hope you enjoy x