This is good. I like the metaphor, because it is different, and I think you really made the comparison make sense. I have a few small critiques though.
"as its honesty lies on the skin it dissolves. " This doesn't sound quite right. How about "lies on my skin and dissolves?" I think it would flow a bit better.
Also, I think the extra line between the last line and the rest of the poem is unnecessary. It would be better if you didn't have it.
Once again, nicely done!
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