Published April 25, 2008
These doldrums my mind floats me on,
Fragmented vision,
Suppressed sigh,
Tired lie…
These scatter midst the waters of my heart,
To only listen!
To only try,
To only die…
Watch the water seep through my sinking body,
Fulfilled vision,
Unseeing eye,
No parting cry,
As these doldrums take my mind from me.
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I liked this. This reminded me of... *cries* Nooo, I thought about it again. I told myself not to.
Okay, this poem is very strong and I like it's concept. It was a nice poem.
Good job! Keep writing!