Love <3

by ilovejasper72211

Published July 24, 2011

And there I imagine you, once again.
In that floral patterned dress, you stand there, with that aura of love lingering around you, gazing into my eyes with your yet too perfect self.

I love you, I love you, I love you. I will say it again, I love you with all my heart.
Your beauty and personality stuns me to where I can't move a single muscle.

We will never end, only continue. From the desert significance of Nevada, to the green, lush state of Washington.
I can't wait for the rest of my life with you. <3

Now, this short poem shall end here.
But remember, you are never to far away from my mind. <3

Love yours truly,
Anthony James...Forever yours. <3

Comments & reviews · 7
ilovejasper72211 commented Comment · Jul 25, 2011

Thank you (:

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Lindsaroo
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Lindsaroo wrote a review Review · Jul 25, 2011

I can tell it's obviously personal, but if you want my opinion I'm willing to give it.

It's sweet and formal. I think you could have probably broken up some of the lines where there are commas. It just makes it look better and not look like such run-ons. I know they're not, but it's just how it looks and how it reads.

I think you could do more with it, or SAY more, but for what it was, it's a cute little love poem. Not bad.

Good job and good luck (with the writing and the girl ;) )
-Lindsay

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kikialicia31
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kikialicia31 wrote a review Review · Jul 24, 2011

I don't like it, I love it! This is really original and realization. I think that you really need to write more!


Can't wait to read even more,

Alicia.

ilovejasper72211 commented Comment · Jul 24, 2011

Thank you (:

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Tommybear
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Tommybear wrote a review Review · Jul 24, 2011

ahhhhhhhhhhhhh I love this :) great imagery and realization of character and placement. I thought it was very original. The cuteness factor and the originality made it seem so sweet and heartfelt. Innocent. I thought it was a great idea! :) Keep up the good work

ilovejasper72211 commented Comment · Jul 24, 2011

I'll do another one for you sometime this next week. Much longer. <3

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JasperSkye
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JasperSkye wrote a review Review · Jul 24, 2011

Anthony, I love you. This is...wow. I'm in tears right now. x) God...Anyways, thank you. Hahaha. I'm glad I got you to read my story, otherwise you would have never posted that. Xxxxx.

P.S. This is your girlyfriend (as if you didn't already know that...)



The strongest people are not those who show their true strength in front of us but those who win battles we know nothing about.
— Unknown