Published November 12, 2009
I'm the Sky. You are the Earth.
Destined not to meet.
But if by chance a rainy day came by, and it rained for Eternity.
Then and only then will the Sky and Earth meet.
Till then I will only gaze upon the Earth.
Wishing for that day of Eternal rain.
The day Sky and Earth meet.
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sammimot, thank you for the advice and i will take it on board. you have infact got it right, it is about someone dear to me:)i will however post an updated version of it but keep the original one as i wrote it with affection.
xlogan it seems you have not loved someone as you have not really given any advice on how to improve this piece of work but just say its boring.
yours
illuminati
Seems empty and a bit boring. I agree with ^ add some imagery so people can imagine it. It's cool - but a bit..empty, ya' know?
Logan.
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