This is just something silly I suddenly wrote at work. I'm really bad at writing music, but I have some rocky melodies in my head when I read this. It's supposed to be a light-rock thing... something like.. Garbage, but maybe heavier (like Halestorm or The Pretty Reckless). What do you think?
He held me in a way that no one did
And suddenly I felt just what I need
Not a husband, not a lover,
But a wicked special other
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Wicked, I need ya to be.. wicked
I crave you would be.. wicked
Forever after.. wicked
My own disaster.. wicked!
The promises he made don't mean a thing
Those silly words he said are not for real
Not a brother, not a father,
Just my wicked special other
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I didn't find this to be that good. Maybe it's because of the "wicked" word being used so much. I don't have any problem with wicked being used in a song, but what makes the guy wicked? Is it the fact that it's implied he uses you for intimate encounters? I know the song isn't finished yet and perhaps you will elaborate more once it's finished.
Hey there!
I know you said that this isn't finished yet, but even so I think it's great. I love The Pretty Reckless, so I tried imagining it as one of their songs and, with Taylor growl-singing the lyrics, I think it works
I do have a suggestion though -
I think 'need' would be better as 'needed' As it is, it reads like something is missing and with 'needed' the line feels a little more complete to me. Also, 'needed' ryhmes better with 'did' than 'need'
Great job on this and I hope you do finish it
xDudettex
This make me giggle. Have you noticed that rock songs always sound funny without the music. I'll try to imagine it with rock music! *strains* ah. Got it.
Ok. this was really cool. I like the word wicked in general. Good job!
Thanks!
I'm thinking about expanding the verses, but I want to leave the chorus as short as it is.. How do you think I could improve the rhythm of the chorus?
The song isn't really finished yet... It is short, yeah
Pretty cool! It's quite a short song O.O but I think it's good. The chorus has an okay rhythm but could be better
. Other then that, good rhyming and description.