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Problems encountered by Teenagers

by iamdianajustine


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“We cannot solve our problems with the same thinking we have when we created them”.

- Albert Einstein

Problems. As said, it isn’t something we heard new. We tempt to bid goodbye on these kinds of instances. For some reasons it’ll be managed as a joke. The worst is, upon all these struggles in life some may be taking it way too seriously and possibly end up on something hideous and complicated. It may turn a lot of things around but what else could ever be the point in life if we don’t have these. It is important to always have somebody on your back. Especially when there came a time when you don’t know who to turn to. Never lose hope, just as what they said. The very first person you could talk on to with these are your parents. Problems are not always taken advice from peers or barkadas. According to Hatter friends [or barkadas] can have a significant effect on his emotional stability and behavior. This may be the reason why parents and teens are having a hard time on sharing with each other’s problems.From the different aspects on the problems experienced by a teenager, the most prominent issues are in social, financial and personal.

This is something really personal that’s why it is one of the common problems of an ordinary teen. Personal problems as to have almost 60-70% of the teens are facing. Communication is important. It binds the soul from another soul. It helps understand opinion from each other. What really makes it hard for communication to promulgate is that everybody thought it so hard to justify the right between the wrong on what are you fighting for. Just as to what other couples used to have lack into that definitely have their relationship cascade drastically down and may lead to such break ups. Then each of them will finally meet each other’s chosen couples and then broke up again. There is nothing in life that is permanent, everything changes. Love isn’t something that should be taken for granted. Why would you let go on someone so important? Whom you always talked about to and mean the whole universe to you? Why would you damage such fragile heart? But focusing on how the world is going around today, serious damages and accidents are happening if love is not handled well. Time is changing, very fast. What’s what or what’s been important and up to before is already old and hardly given importance.

Second thing on what teenagers are facing are their financial problems. Money is also the major problems the country is facing. It could be the problem always have on mind by our parents a lot. Each cent they earn is important. Every drop, every breath they take, every beat their heart pumps are important. Teens tend to over think on spending way too much. Especially when their whole school/university is covered up of eye catching stores, sweet smelling foods and colorful stuffs and accessories that mostly teens are dying to have for. Temptation is a real serious problem. According to Sanjana temptations are a part and parcel of every person’s life. Without succumbing to them life is incomplete. Which clearly explains a lot of teen’s life are always experiencing different kinds of tragic phenomena that possibly leading them on falling down. Falling into temptations is common. But you must not always forget to stand up and clean up the mess you just did.

Lastly, is the social problem faced by teenagers. Social problem is so bounded that teens are experiencing this daily. From around the corner of the school, on the middle of your cafeteria or just from across the room you are located to. You’re seeing this everyday but you never did make a move about it. Just from the wounds and bruises your troubled friend got from a group of big fat bullies. Bullying is something that is being done in a coercive way. Why are people nowadays are so scared on fighting for their right? Why isn’t that justice may be always prevailed? Why is it that such small problems can’t be taken remedy at ease so that it may never lead on to something too serious to cope up with.

Problems are always there. They never end. It comes in many forms, types and kinds. It’ll come out before you know it. Or it’ll just appear and surprise you by the time comes. We just need guidance and hope to triumph over it. The believe in you. The confidence and faith within yourself. The mind and soul of the person.


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Hi iamdianajustine, I've read through your work and I believe you've put across a few interesting points that hadn't really occurred to me big time. Well done. Anyway, I am The Raven and I will be reviewing your work at this moment. My review will be divided up into What is Good and What Needs Improvement/Suggestions. Now, let's get down to business...

What is Good:
1) Your view of temptation is a unique one I've never really heard of. Temptation is a very negative thing. The term itself is highly negative. However, you saw it in a slightly more positive light, and I believe I understand why. Interesting.

What Needs Improvement/Suggestions:

1) Unfortunately, your use of the English language is the worse I've ever seen coming from this website. In the first paragraph alone...

Problems. As said, it isn’t something we heard new.


Why is 'new' placed at the back? Syntax error. Moreover, 'As said' is far too informal for an essay. Worse of all, this is your beginning sentence, so 'as said' is a fallacy in itself. Nothing is being said yet.

We tempt to bid goodbye on these kinds of instances.


tempt is used wrongly. Did you mean 'tend'? Also, 'on these kinds of' is superfluous, and too informal in tone. Try 'We tend to bid goodbye on such instances.' However, as you're writing an essay and not a poetry piece, even with this sentence fixed, the sentence itself might be too metaphorical and device-driven. Try to be a bit more plain. There's merit in being plain too.

The worst is, upon all these struggles in life some may be taking it way too seriously and possibly end up on something hideous and complicated.


What do you mean is worse by writing 'The worst is'? Also, there should be a verb attached to 'struggles', for example 'upon combating all these struggles in life, some may[...]'

The last bit of the sentence is too vague. End up with what thing? What do you mean by hideous and complicated? Again, you are not writing a poetry piece, and you're supposed to be as informative as possible.

could ever be the point in life if we don’t have these


What point do you mean? 'Don't have these' is too informal.

to always have somebody on your back


This should be 'to always have somebody watching your back'.

Especially when there came a time


I believe it shouldn't be in the past tense. In fact, an essay should never be in the past tense unless you're referring to historical events or something like that.

The very first person you could talk on to with these are your parents.


Wrong use of conjunctions/conjugations or whatever they're called - I was never the technical type, but anyway, it should be... 'The very first people [you're talking about more than one person, so person does not suffice] you talk to about this are your parents.'

According to Hatter friends [or barkadas] can have a significant effect on his emotional stability and behavior.


In writing an essay, always take note that you're contributing to a pool of information shared globally. Therefore, you must make your language international. There is nothing wrong in using local diction (where appropriate), but you must explain them if they cannot be understood immediately in the context. That said, I have completely no idea what a Hatter friend is, and consequently what a Barkadas is.

parents and teens are having a hard time on sharing with each other’s problems.


Should be 'parents and teens have a hard time sharing each other's problems.' A lot of unnecessary words there.

And that is in the first paragraph alone. With this amount of mistakes permeating 90% of your sentences, the only remedy is to completely overhaul your essay.

2) Overall, the tone of your essay is too informal and casual. It lends no authority to your essay. Use more standard sentence structures, less contractions and stop calling bullies 'big fat bullies' for a better essay voice.

3) Also, you should regulate who you are referring to. Sometimes, you are referring to teenagers in the general population, which is fine, but sometimes, you are implicating the readers, or everyone. It's highly inconsistent, and if I'm not wrong, is unacceptable in the essay format. An essay should be impersonal, I believe, the product of a disinterested observer. Not that there is anything wrong with being an interested observer as long as you can do it right, but that's another story.

4) You fell into the questions trap in the second paragraph. Never ask too many questions. You're supposed to be the one giving answers to questions. It would have been fine if the questions have a purpose, but if it begins to posit questions without giving an answer, then it will prove detrimental to your essay. Oh, and you did it again in the second last paragraph.

5) You will need a lot more citations than you're giving. You are making a lot of claims without backing them up. This reaches a climax with you giving a 60%-70% figure without any evidence.

6) Your conclusion is unsatisfactory. You should be bold! Assert yourself! Never be afraid to make claims, even if they might offend! Never be afraid to put forward huge solutions and conclusions. After all, you are not building a skyscraper by hand. You are instructing people on how to build a skyscraper by hand.

That's all I have for you. I hope my review helps.




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Sun Oct 06, 2013 3:01 pm
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This is a very good essay. .I agree with what you said




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Sun Oct 06, 2013 10:41 am
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nicez a lab it ^_^ teach me

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nice writing skills i love it

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Nice Work. :)




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Magnificent I Like It

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For a beginner like you i can say the you have a great potential in writing. The topic is explained very well and all that i need to know about the topic is there. nice job keep up the good work.
job well done iamdianajustine ^_^

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For a beginner like you i can say the you have a great potential in writing. The topic is explained very well and all that i need to know about the topic is there. nice job keep up the good work.
job well done iamdianajustine ^_^

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For a beginner writer like you i can say is that you have a great potential in writing.The topic is there and you explain it very well . Nice job keep up the good work.
job well done iamdianajustine ^_^

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Nice effort. :) keep up the good work..

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yeah nice very well said




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Great Article..:D

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Great Article..:D

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Nice! God bless:)

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Nice Article..:D

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the story behind it and the containing ideas is somewhat well done. :)

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Nice job. :D Try writing another. You can do better. :D





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