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So, now for this work.
I want pretty surprised when I started reading this befause you use your own vocabulary very well. You do not use well known words to express such a thing as the wind. The wind has by itself many ways to be described. For a first work, you had done a very good job and I really do not have any negatives or complains to mention. Only one small mistake you need to correct and you are done. This work is perfect the way it is and the flow is going on smoothly.
an authors dream
It needs to be 'autor's dream' or 'autors' dream'.
It depends on what you prefer to say. I prefer the first, personally. You had started with perfect punctuation but mid way it was ruined. Only mentioning to use small letters after each comma.
Good job!
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