Prologue
Love. It's a strange word, it can mean so many things to so many different people. The dictionary says: "a profoundly tender, passionate affection for another person." But love can't be defined just by these simple words, love is something so deep that the greatest poets have yet to write it's true meaning. "Every one deserves someone to love," is what I have heard people say countless times over my long existence. But even so I have never found love. And I really don't think I ever will.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Well this is quite an interesting piece. I don't believe I've run into anything of quite this nature before especially in a prologue. This one feels quite distinctly different from most other prologues I've run into and it seems to be building on an idea you don't typically expect to run into in a prologue here, or at least I've never seen how something like this could've been used.
At any rate, this does send quite the message here as it starts off in this manner. Its certainly a very interesting idea to focus and even more interesting sentiment to chose to focus on and well I daresay this means it does do its job as a prologue quite well by really pulling us in into the world here.
Overall, this one is certainly a bit of an unconventional prologue. I've never run into anything quite like this before but it is certainly an enjoyable one and one that makes you think quite a bit. I'd say it manages to do its job as a prologue really quite well here, and the only thing that is perhaps missing is a tiny bit more context for these feelings.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Yeah thanks for catching that I always forget what it's supposed to be
And yeah I normally do flashbacks for prologues but it seemed like this one just worked better as short and sweet. I did have a alternate version of this and I asked my sister which one she liked better and she said this one so that's just what I posted.
Thanks so much for the input!
This is short and sweet. For a prologue, you do not have to have a lot in it, maybe a couple of paragraphs. What you have is excellent. I do not think that you need to add anything else to this. I did not find any mistakes and I noticed that you changed pro-log to prologue. Still I think pro-log had a nice ring to it too. Well I am off to read the chapters.
Hiya!
Just a quick point, easy mistake to make though
I loved this prologue, I like the way you use the dictionary quote. Its really creative. You could expand this prologue by speaking more about the character a little, adding some creative diologue or flashbacks. A flashback in this prologue would make it a whole lot better than it already is
Give me a shout when you post Chapter 1, or if you need help with anything
Forgotten x
#FF0000 "> well done. i like it. at the end it displays the characters pesimism but i assume that in the story he/she gets proved wrong...? keep writing, it sounds interesting. i will look out for the first chapter