Young Writers Society

Hey Hannah, Lee here for a short review!

Straight off, I love the format of this poem; it's very aesthetic and doesn't feel forced. Good on you! I also like how you've made use of enjambments throughout the piece to led it a good sense of continuity.

I have just one nitpick
After "my friend," there ought to be a comma, don't you think? Either that, or the following line shouldn't begin with a capital letter. This isn't a huge issue, of course, just a small observation.

I enjoy the general sense of sadness in this poem; i can relate to losing friends.

This was a lovely read! Good job and keep writing!

~Lee

Sunflower here for a quick little review!
Okay it's alway the short poems or stories that end up getting me going: "Wow people are amazing with what they can come up with!". Quite honestly I loved this, it's short it's simple it's wonderful! Maybe it's the music I'mm listening to to help add to the wow factor I'm not sure but either way I love this and it deserves some recognition! I could probably say more about it but I don't think I need to the beauty of the work speaks for itself! I hope you have a fantastic day/night and keep on writing! Bye!