Published April 16, 2009
A voice carries with the wind,
A soul dances in the rain,
A girl hurts on the outside
To rid the inside pain.
Three short words spoken
By two fragile lovers,
Becomes a tragic tale,
With more promises broken.
A tear falls and crashes,
A whisper is heard, secrets released aloud,
We’re all in an empty room,
Trying to lose ourselves within a crowd.
As a girl writes her devastating verses,
Her heart becomes shattered.
Her tears fall on the fairytale,
A story about how love once mattered.
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