I want to go where great tigers roam,
I want to go where white rivers foam.
I want to visit where thoughts digress,
I want to visit where there is no stress.
I want to live where I appear sane,
I want to live where there is no hate or pain.
I want to discover this place on my own,
I want to discover her so I am not alone.
I want to go home now because this place is too much, I fear,
I want to go home now because this place has become too soft upon prying ears.
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I loved this poem
I liked the way you did the whole repetitive thing too.
Its a good way to write poems in my opinion.
That is a very good poem and you should be proud (Y)
And I think many people can relate to it.
hmm..
I like the simplicity of this piece. It's sounds like play-by-play action but conveys more than that.
I espicially like the first line.
Hi
This was a really great piece.Really simple and understandable to the reader.
I want to discover her so I am not alone.
What makes this place her instead of it.Or maybe its just the way of the poem.
Your poem captured a very important aspect of people-need to escape to another quiet and serene place.Many people will be able to identify with your poem.
All the best with your other works.
Hello!
I like this poem. At first, there is a good rhyme and rythm. And this poem has meaning. Most of people want to go to some place without pain, stress, lonelyness... But as I understood this place has become not so good. Lyrical character is afraid of it, and even in this place there are some unpleasent things. (I'm not good at reviews, may be I understood not right the end of your story).
I think, that you worked well.
I wish you success in writing.