Published February 14, 2009
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I adore poems that begin and end in the same manner. Great job with that.
Gold star.
This is a love poem but somehow you made it really fresh. Not cliche. I loved how in the first part it's you wishing for the love once more and then it progresses to you thanking he has found someone that can make him happy. This to me, was like a story simmering beneath the poetry.XD
All in all, this was beautiful.
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As a general rule of thumb, try to keep your stanzas the same length unless they come at the very end of he poem. The one with three lines threw off the flow a bit. Also, if you are going to rhyme, keep it consistant. I like how you started and ended the same way. It tied the poem off very nicely. Overall, it was good.