So, for college applications I needed to write a common app essay the prompt was: Some students have a background or story that is so central to their identity that they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story.
so this is what I decided to write. Please review it and give me feedback.
Not all fighting is dangerous, or violent, and sometimes not even against someone else. Fighting is bravery, strength, and courage. It’s persistence, it’s not giving up, and it is determination. It’s not easy, typically fighting means a struggle but just because it is a struggle doesn’t mean you give up.
I know what it’s like to fight, but I needed to find strength within me to win the battle. December of 2011 I was diagnosed with Crohn’s Disease. I felt defeated since it was my own body turning against me. I couldn’t eat anything without having to throw up, I couldn’t last a day without a fever, and when I went to see a doctor they were perplexed. I ended up losing 30 pounds, and was not able to get up; because of this I missed a great portion of school. It was difficult, but I pressed on and finished the school year with a 3.4 GPA. It was not an easy task but I fought hard for my grades even with me missing a lot of the information.
A year after being diagnosed, my junior year, I was still suffering from medical issues. During this time period, along with fighting Crohn’s, I got in a snowboarding accident and suffered from a concussion and whip lash. Once again I missed school for a while to recover from my injuries. Even when I could go back to school it was difficult since I had to wear a neck brace. I ended up being months behind in work and I stayed after almost every day to make up what I needed to. I worked all the way up to the last day of school in order to hand everything in. Battling a concussion seemed even worse than having Crohn’s since I couldn’t exactly retain or remember the knowledge. The sad thing is I like learning new information and gaining knowledge but all my medical issues made it hard to accomplish that. I didn’t stop trying though and I finished my year with a 3.0 GPA and still made it my mission to understand what I didn’t before.
You could fight for your rights, for love, for yourself, but what I found most important is to fight for others. I have learned throughout my life to be brave, to stick up for those who can’t stick up for themselves. I know what it is like to get bullied, it happened every day in middle school. No one stood up for me or came to my rescue. I learned to fight for myself, but I also learned that I am not the only one. I wanted everyone to feel safe in their environment and feel like they had someone to count on. I learned from Gandhi that In order to see a change in the world, you have to start with yourself. I no longer let people walk all over me, or anybody I see getting harassed. I refused to be an innocent bystander even if that meant they attacked me next. I learned how important it is to fight for other people because if I show I am willing to stand up for them, then they can stand up for themselves too.
I am shaped through my experiences. I wouldn’t be who I am today without the problems I’ve faced and the lessons I have learned because of them. I am a fighter of good, rather than evil. I lead by example, to show others that you can be successful if you’re willing to fight for what you want whether that’s personal health, or anti-bullying. It’s possible to fight without fists, and it’s possible for change without violence. If you have the determination and strength to fight, you have the power to succeed.
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