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Lila was already at Willow Creek Park when I arrived, her figure half-hidden in the evening mist that had settled over the grounds. She looked almost ethereal, standing alone beneath the shadow of a towering willow, her silhouette blending into the gloom. She didn’t seem to notice me approach, her gaze fixed on something I couldn’t see, somewhere far beyond the trees.
“Punctual,” I said, stepping up beside her. “Good quality in a partner.”
She didn’t respond, her eyes scanning the park’s darkening edges. “It’s colder here than I expected,” she murmured, more to herself than to me. “Feels like a place that’s forgotten warmth.”
I followed her gaze, feeling a chill of my own as I took in the familiar layout of the park. It was a quiet place, popular among teenagers looking for a secluded spot to unwind, but it held an unsettling stillness tonight.
“You’re the one who wanted to get a feel for the place,” I reminded her, hoping to snap her out of whatever trance she’d fallen into. “Let’s get started.”
She gave me a half-smile, one that barely reached her eyes. “I’m just thinking about Sarah,” she replied softly. “About how easy it would’ve been for her to feel…safe here.”
That one word—safe—hung in the air between us, thick with implication. Safe places don’t simply swallow people whole.
We spent the next hour combing through the park, searching for anything that might have escaped the initial investigation. Lila’s approach was meticulous; she scanned the ground, the trees, the benches as if every shadow held an answer. But the longer we searched, the more I realized she was watching me just as much as she was examining the park. Testing me.
Eventually, we made our way back to the street, where the occasional light flickered from the windows of nearby houses. The quiet of Blackwood seemed to press in on us, amplifying the footsteps that broke the silence.
“You mentioned interviewing her friends tomorrow,” Lila said, her voice snapping me back to the task at hand. “Anything you’re hoping to find?”
“Connections,” I said simply, though I knew it was more than that. I was hoping for a lead, a hint—something that would break the pattern of silence Blackwood seemed so adept at maintaining.
The next morning, we met with Sarah’s best friend, a girl named Jessie who looked like she hadn’t slept in days. She sat across from us in the station, nervously twisting her hands in her lap, her gaze darting between me and Lila.
“She was…she was acting weird the last few days,” Jessie began, her voice barely a whisper. “Like she kept looking over her shoulder, even when we were just walking to school.”
“What was she afraid of?” Lila asked, her voice gentle, coaxing. I noticed Jessie visibly relax, drawn in by the softness in Lila’s tone.
“I…I don’t know. She never told me,” Jessie replied, looking down. “She just said…that someone was watching her. Following her, maybe.” She hesitated, casting a wary glance at me before her gaze slid back to Lila. “But when I asked who, she just laughed it off. Said it was nothing.”
“Did she mention meeting anyone at the park that night?” I pressed; my tone sharper than intended.
Jessie’s eyes flashed with something—annoyance, maybe, or even fear. “No,” she replied defensively. “Sarah didn’t tell me everything. But I know she was scared.”
Lila leaned forward slightly; her expression sincere. “Jessie, did she ever mention anything unusual? Something she saw? Something that seemed off about people around town?”
Jessie shifted uncomfortably, her hands clenching into fists. “Well…there was this one guy,” she admitted, almost reluctantly. “She said he’d been around the park a lot recently, just…hanging out, watching people. She didn’t know his name.”
“Can you describe him?” I asked, feeling the first pulse of hope since we’d started the investigation.
“Tall, dark hair. Always wore this…this old leather jacket,” she replied, her voice wavering. “But I don’t know anything else. He just…he made her nervous.”
Lila’s eyes met mine, a look passing between us that needed no words. We had our first lead.
After Jessie left, Lila and I spent the rest of the day tracking down Sarah’s other friends, piecing together bits of information that might help us understand who Sarah had been waiting for at the park. As we worked, a strange rhythm settled between us. Her methods were unorthodox, sure—she had a way of drawing people out, of making them talk about things they didn’t even realize they were hiding. It was a skill that made me uneasy, yet undeniably effective.
“What about you?” she asked suddenly as we walked out of the latest interview. “Anything in Blackwood’s history that matches this pattern?”
I hesitated, searching for the right words. “There’ve been…stories,” I admitted, feeling the familiar prick of unease. “Legends, even. People have gone missing before, but nothing ever stuck. No clues, no evidence—just…vanished.”
She looked at me thoughtfully, her gaze intense. “And you’ve always believed it was just…stories?”
“Stories don’t make people disappear, Detective Ray,” I replied tersely, though I couldn’t shake the nagging feeling that there was more to it. And as I looked at Lila, I wondered what she knew about disappearances—more than she was letting on, if I had to guess.
“Maybe not,” she said softly. “But sometimes…sometimes they’re just shadows of something real.”
I didn’t have an answer for that, and for once, I didn’t feel the need to find one. Instead, I focused on the case, the leads, and the elusive figure with the leather jacket. Yet in the back of my mind, something about Lila continued to tug at me—something dark, hidden beneath her calm exterior. She was right; shadows could sometimes be real.
And Blackwood was full of them.
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Hi there, ghostwriter15na! Dropping by to give you a review. I will be using the YWS'mores method to help structure my review.

The Top Graham Cracker: I want to apologize in advance, I have not read the previous chapters, so my review will be based solely on this chapter alone. I will provide feedback as best as I can and give you the perspective of a reader who may one day pick up your book and flip to a random page to see if it's entertaining enough for them to fully read.
So far, this chapter has a really good hook! I really like the way this is starting off, with a beautiful description of Lila.
The Slightly Burnt Marshmallow: I have nothing to critique! Let me explain why...
The Melty Chocolate Bar This was really good! I am pleasantly surprised! And I must say, as a reader who picked this book up and essentially flipped to a random page to see if I would be interested in reading this... it definitely worked! I am intrigued! I definitely want to know more about Sarah and what happened to her, who Lila is, who our narrator is, and what's going on.
This was incredibly well-written. I really enjoyed how descriptive you were, especially with Lila and the way everyone received her, including the narrator. It seems like she's a very charming person with an alluring personality. Judging by our narrator calling her "Detective Ray", I assume she's a very good detective. Good at making people comfortable, loose, and chatty. Very interesting, indeed.
The pacing and the flow of this chapter was fantastic. I was definitely enthralled and did not get distracted once. I like the subtle mystery and suspense you sprinkled throughout this chapter, especially at the end.
My favorite lines were these:
The Bottom Graham Cracker: Overall, I really enjoyed this and I genuinely am curious to learn more about this story! I see there's two previous chapters to read so I definitely plan on reading those over the weekend to get a better idea of what's going on. Again, amazing job at capturing the reader's attention right away and keeping them engaged the entire time. Can't wait to see more from you!
I hope this review was a bit helpful.
~Iggy
Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!
Shalt we commence with the ghoulish S’more?
Top Graham Cracker - Ethan and Lila investigate at the park, Jessie reveals a clue as to who may have taken Sarah, the detectives keep searching, Ethan seems to be very uneasy about what is to come.
Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - This is only the third chapter, so I’m sure that more is to come, but I do want to see more of the strange things happening in Blackwood that everyone is talking about. This is just what I think, though. If you don’t agree then you can ignore this.
Chocolate Bar - Lila seems to be the most intriguing to me. I like how she’s so careful with studying everything, even analyzing Ethan! Yet she speaks to people in a comforting tone, an effective strategy as they will feel more at ease and reveal more things. My favorite part was when she was talking to Jessie, it shows that she’s a detective with heart!
Closing Graham Cracker - Well, they have an idea of who may have kidnapped Sarah. I think that the person who did it was the tall man that Ethan saw in the first chapter. I could be wrong, though. As they get closer and closer to solving the truth, there threatens to be a darkness that may as well make their peace of mind burst…
I wish you a sparkling day/night! :>