Young Writers Society

Ahoy hoy,

I don't really have much to say on this poem since (1) I'm not very good at reviewing poems, and (2) this is already perfect, so this is going to be short and sweet.

The only criticism I have is the word choice of "badder" which, though it fits into the rhyme scheme, it takes away some of the poem's impact as it's such a simple word and not often seen in serious works, if you get what I'm trying to say.
Asides from this, the rhyme scheme is also a little wonky in places but it isn't glaringly wrong (at least to me).

Either way, please don't take my comments to heart and do know that I love this poem and the message you are putting forwards.

Have a nice day,
- H.G

I really love this poem. I'm glad you wrote it!

hey galaxygem,
i am here with a review
i really loved how you have shown and emphasised that all lives matter even if we have different race colours

"When we protest for lost black lives

You say, “All Lives Matter!”

it clearly is saying that we tend to forget that there is another race that we dont include when we say all lives matter

Heya galaxygem,

Shady here with a review for your lovely poem! I generally go from specific comments to broad. Let's get started...

Thrown out and bruised inside and out

Only to be thrown in a cage to stay?

Don’t just cherry-pick and choose

Which lives you think should matter.

Thank you for posting this beautiful piece of work <3

Hi Galaxygem!

This is a beautiful poem about a terrible issue. I seriously think this should be shown to everyone who says "All lives matter." See how they respond -if they can even respond at all .

Every line sounds like a slap in the face. Honestly, those people are hypocrites if they don't respect other races, sexual orientation, or religion.

The rhythm is great, and I love your choice of words. You're tearing them down!

The last two lines felt so strong

*Standing ovation*

:O Amazing!!

Hi galaxygem,
I'm here with a review. I loved your poem because it shows how all lives matter. It made me smile to know that people care about this. It's an important topic and I couldn't be happier to review this.
As for grammar, I found a mistake that might be a stylistic choice after all.
"Who you think are badder"
Badder should be worst.
I would also suggest you add rhyme. Not only it will sound better but using rhymes will make it easier to remember. Maybe this way people will remember the message and act differently.

I believe you have an amazing poem and I hope I get to read more from you,
MoonIris.

Hi! This is a great poem honouring everyone's life. The issue raised and the message given through this is so genuine and brought a smile on my face. Through your words you have given power to every human being here.
The last lines especially just fill the reader and lead her into world of introspection. Although a lot has been said about black lives mattering. But this is something new and genuine and really touching!
Gem! Your poetry was indeed a gem. I am not someone who has a very critical point of view. But I loved this one and thought to tell you this from this kinda - appreciative review.
This was a lovely piece. And more than ever I could relate to this as I am someone who believes this in her heart.
Good job!
Keep Writing!!!!
Happy RevMo