Behind the shadows, chapter 1,The Jungle of Hulm, part 1

Thanks!!!! That always nice to hear. I don't hear that often. Ya I do try my best. Thanks for reading my story.

Your English is quite good. You do have a few grammar errors though. I suggest that you have someone edit it before posting. Plus, that will help with your English grammar. (= Hope that helps.

I'm going to point out the grammer errors first. ^_^ My corrections and comments will be in bold since the colors hate me.

Why did he do that? Why,why, why??? [There isn't a space between the first comma and the second "why." Also, I really don't think 3 question marks would be nessesary, one will do.]

Why did her father do that to her, they use to be so close to one another. But he hed to put here in the horible place were they use her like a slave. making her work from sun rise to sun set in the field onder the burning sun. [Third sentance, first word isn't capitalized and needs to be.]

"Why?" She said at loud "WHY?"

A squirrel coming down a tree look at her in wonder. But she couldn't care less. She Wanted to SCREAM.

[Last words in both paragraphs shouldn't be capitalized.]

i have waited long enough him. ["I" needs to be capitalized.]

Irina didn't actully care much for [add "a" between these words.] title. [Change the period to a comma and make the "but" lower case.] But still this was to much. Irina stoped; she was in the middle of her and did paie atantion that she was in front of a dark forest.

Like her father [comma ^_^] she had a gift for fighting. Thinking Of [Don't capitalize "of."] her father made her mad all over again. Her decision was made [Comma] she was no longer waiting. She was running away.

It soon grew darker and Irina realize [realized, not realize] the mistake she had made.

"No one can stop me or let them trie!" [It's "try," not trie.]

Plus [comma] she had only a dagger for protection.

"I hope i wont have to fight a tiger or a [an, not a] elastic bear." she murmur to herself.

She had no idea why elastic bear were called that way. She hasn't care [sorry but it's cared] before, but at this moment [comma] this small detail seem really important.

Which in both case was only true. [you said both, which means your going to have to say cases instead of just case]

As she looked around she notice how hostile the forest look. ["the" needs to be capitalized] the tree were wide and tall; their truck were almost black. Their [I think it would sound better with the word "the" instead] leaves were of a dork [lol, dork green? Dark green. ^_^] green or of a dry blood red. On the ground [I don't think that's spelled correctly... -->] infamiler plant grew. All of them had thorn of different kind and size. No bright flower like in any other forest, all was dark. [<-- that whole setance doesn't really make sense...]

[first word of every sentance needs to be capitalized] the sound of her own voice conforted her. The jungle was silent deadly silent, but Irina could feel the presence of all kind of different creature of darkness. Irana [<-- I think it would sound better with "she" instead of the name. Oh and, wasn't her name Irina?] know [knew, not know] that she had to cross the forest; it was the fastess [fastest] way to reach Fael, her mother country.

Beside [I think you mean, besides, add comma after that word, too.] the farmer and his man would never thing of coming this way to look for her.

i ["I" needs to be capilized.] can do this [put a comma after "this"] she try to convince herself. But it was no use [needs a comma] the darkness of the forest took all hope of crossing, [doesn't need a comma ^_^] out of her. It was to late to turn back now [needs a comma] she had to continue.