I really loved this poem! Your different uses of space and rhythm were effective in communicating the meaning of your words, and your actual word choice was precise and powerful. I like the repeated use of the sick day and bus stop ideas, and how you used these specific situations to create a deeper meaning. You were also very good at making this poem flow, beginning slowly, descending in a powerful rush, and ending calmly once again. Overall, I don't have any criticisms about your piece and I enjoyed reading it
Points: 282
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