Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
And the time comes for chapter 2.
First Impression: Umm....not sure if this should be a separate chapter...or maybe this is the same chapter as chapter 1 judging by the part two in the name. So...more backstory. That though doesn't belong in here at all. You would be much better off putting that whole android story into a prologue. Speaking of which I am not even going to attempt to see if that is a plausible thing that could have actually happened.
Anyway let's get to it,
Kerra walked down the narrow walkways to her home. While the walkways in the Upper Mains had been bright, broad thoroughfares of foot traffic, the walkways here were made of a sturdy black metal and were only wide enough for a single person. Luckily, there was rarely cause for two people going separate directions to be on the same walkway at once. Kerra tried to imagine some of the fancy Mains women walking in killer stilettos across the gridded metal, and ended up chuckling when they inevitably twisted their ankles.
That's a pretty nice description there.
Soon, the black metal of the walkway reflected the dull red sheen of faux-neon lights. The Drowned Goliath was a semi-seedy pub directly beneath Kerra’s apartment. If she wasn’t such a night-owl, she might have objected to the raucous music and chatter that lasted until the wee hours every morning. But those were the hours Kerra was usually most awake, and she appreciated the noise to remind her that the usually otherwise silent and darkened world wasn’t dead.
So everyone in the council is also a night owl?
She climbed up a level, and reached a landing with four identical doors, set apart by numbers. Hers was LD97Y14A. [[Lower Downs, pillar number 97, section Y, Floor 14, Apartment A.]] She shoved her wrist at the scanner in her door, it unlocked, and at last, she was home.
That is a ridiculously long address.
She melted onto the overstuffed forest green sofa that sat in her living room. Every time Kerra saw it, she was reminded of photos of fat green frogs sitting on tree branches, looking bloated and self-satisfied. It didn’t match any other furniture in her house, but it was the comfiest couch she’d ever sat on, and its unconventional color made it half the price of the other couches in the store.
That's a very new way of looking at a couch.
Her apartment was a fourth of the circular pillar. Her large living room, bed room, and kitchen windows had excellent views of the lights in the city, most of which came from windows identical to hers in rooms identical to hers. The androids who had build the city had created something amazing that should have been impossible, but when it came to details such as varied residential architecture, they didn’t have much imagination.
Well that part of the androids work is believable.
In the beginning of Abyssia, it was much too small for the entire human population that had been in stasis, but they had worked with the space they had. However, being in an unnatural, suspended state for so long (not to mention the high levels of ambient radiation) had wreaked havoc on the gene pool, and infertility was the biggest threat to the future of humanity. The population had been in a steady decline for centuries, and now housing was dirt cheap.
Well that's interesting there.
Shandi? Kerra reached out with her mind to her sister.
What? Shandi snapped back. I’m a little busy right now.
I was just wondering if maybe we could get together again soon. I’ve been missing your lively company.
There was a short silence, but Kerra waited patiently.
Yeah, sure. How does later tonight sound? Do you mind if I bring a few friends?
Kerra smiled to herself. I’d expect nothing less.
Well that should be an exciting person to meet.
Aaand that's it.
Overall: Again besides the info dumpy nature of the information it was all really interesting. We are getting decent sense of the sort of person that Kerra is. Still no clear plot in sight but then it is still the very beginning.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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