Published April 29, 2007
Half the sun shown on the horizon
Dust and sand settled as did the sun
Darkness will soon come
And the light soon will go
Colors are shining until moonbeams show
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Very nice concept. The ryme almost seemed unintentional..very good. It needs a significant amount of development, though.
Wow, that was really nice.
I always try to write something about nature... but I always end up writing a novelette for teens... lol
Your really good for your age.
-Em to the Ily
I like this. It's simple, but it has RHYME!! Goodie, I love rhymes, cos I can never rhyme successfully myself. I like the last line best, it rounds it off nicely.
-Twit