Drunk

I enjoyed reading this. I found that it could hold so many meanings, like that people push you around, using your emotions for there own success. Or that you think so much about certain things that you seem to almost be dunk off of your thoughts. Like here where you said"I am a wine bottle

so full of emotions

everyone takes a sip
It seems like someone is just feeding off of your sorrow, but they couldn't care less how you feel. This is just what I took from it. Wither or not that's what you meant, I enjoyed it all the same. Well done. Very nice work.

Hey there hopeless here to give you a review.


So I wanted to start off by saying I love this poem it is very good. I also wanted to say that it flows great and I love how well you tell what the wine gives to the drinker, you have a real talent for this. I think it would be better if you had punctuation added on to it. It would make it flow better in my opinion. You should make more like this though, you show how well of a writer you are by even this one poem. Thanks for this very cool and amazing poem!


Keep writing and stay beautiful

-Sara Belle

I love this! I think you played very well to what the wine "gives" to people. I like the way it is structured, the brokenness makes it very beautiful.
My only suggestion is that maybe you could expand your poem by going more in-depth between the relationship of the wine and those who drink it! Awesome job I love this!

Hm, in terms of meaning, it's good, but in terms of actual poetry it seems...fractured, like each line was rearranged at some point. This is great, and all but I don't feel like you are really baring your emotions, look for things that rhyme (pretty important for the sake of being fluid), yell those emotions at the readers, maybe even whine a little.

Then when your done, try to sing it to yourself, find a beat, a tone, a means of stumbling along it, just to make sure it all keeps rolling.