Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
First Impression: So this was definitely a very interesting project that you have here. Its seems like a pretty cliche forbidden love kind of storyline that you are going for but it does have some fairly unique additions to the whole thing it seems you were the one who came up with. Its definitely a pretty fun little plot description of sorts for whatever this particular plot ends up being a part of.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Firebreathers. Aquatics. The two different species have been fighting since the begininng of time. Firbreathers were the evil ones. Or that was how the Aquatics saw them. The aquatics did everything they could to eliminate the firebrethers. But for the firebreathers to defeat an aquatic the have to let the fire inside them take over. Waking up hours later not remembering anything. That is why the firebreathers were "evil". Many prophecies were among the firebreathers people, but one in particular was the most important. A girl would be born from a phrophecy saying that the girl born with the body of flames would change the world of firebrethers as they knew it. The body of flames licked her entire body. iNtimidating any firebreather or Aquatic that crossed her path. Her mark would glow in any strong emotion. She would be born with emmense power that no other firebreather could compare to. That girl was Alana Khepri.
Well that is an interesting thing there to start off with. It does sound more like some kind of pitch for a movie than an actual short story because it looks like you are just describing a possible idea for a story. That being said it does sound like a really good idea for a story and I would definitely read that story it was ever written. You've got some really interesting concepts put in there and it looks like it'll be some really fun worldbuilding that goes into it. The idea of this prophecy and the chosen one thing,
Alana Khepri is not a normal girl. She is beautiful in every way except one. Her body is covered in a birth mark of celtic flames. She was born a firebreather. She can create, control, and manipulate fire. . With 6 brothers constintly on her tail she barely has a life. But when she meets the free, and funny Jason he brings out something in her that she didn't think she had. But when she tells him what she is she realizes what he is. An Aquatic. Her enemy. When she still wants him even for their differences. Her family becomes suspicious. They realize that she has been with an aquatic and they are trying to discover who it is. Alana tries to find a loophole between her love for Jason and how she was grown up to live. Her instincts tell her to kill Jason. But her heart can't live without him. She decides to keep Jason secret from everyone. But her ex love returns to town and knows she's hiding something. He follows her out to the woods and sees her with him. he tells her family and a feud breaksout between the enemies. Alana is forced to fight against the Aquatica but when she is captured by Jason's brothers they realize that the evil they thought was in fire breathers might not be there. Alana tries to show them that firebreathers aren't always in control of their abilities. That firebreather themselves are not evil but the fire inside them that haunts their souls. Alana is on the bridge of death but can her and Jason's love be able to save her?[/b]
Well that sounds like a plot summary that is also somehow a blurb. Its a little confusing to try to see what exactly this thing is trying to tell us. But it does sound like it would be a pretty awesome story for a book or a movie as you seem to have titled this saying this would be a movie.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
Overall: Overall this was a pretty well done little synopsis for a movie project as you seem to be calling it. Its definitely a movie that I would watch and it seems like a nice take on the traditional forbidden love story cliche. Aaaand so that's about all I have to say for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Points: 260826
Reviews: 4129
Donate