Prologue
I think I am sixteen old, I know I am average weight and height; oh, yeah, and I live in a dome. I’ve lived here for almost a year now. When they elected the new president, he made too many mistakes. This is the year 2017, and this is the story about what happened before, during, and after life in the dome. Who knows if these memories are real? If these memories are real, my name is Vivian.
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Chapter One
Two years earlier
Monday. Serenity Thompson sat down at the breakfast table. She watched her family devour their food as if they had never eaten before. She, however, didn’t touch any of her food. Her mom stopped eating for a second, and glanced at Serenity, “Why aren’t you eating anything?” Serenity rolled her eyes and answered mockingly, “I’m not hungry.” Her mom shrugged and went back to eating, “More for us.”
Serenity never ate, her mom knew this, and yet mom always asked. Serenity should stop answering. She was in a particularly bad mood today, no, she was in one of the worst moods she’d ever been in. Yesterday had been Voting Day and Serenity’s birthday had been the day before. She was now 18. She should have been allowed vote, but her parents didn’t think she should be allowed to help decide the fate of the country. As it turned out, that one vote could have changed everything.
If she had been allowed to vote, she would have voted for Hilary Clinton. Yes, Clinton lied plenty and wasn’t the best choice for president, but the other choice was the one and only bastard Trump. Serenity hadn’t been allowed to vote but if she had voted her one vote would have kept Trump from continuing on as president. At this very moment, Trump was getting himself into trouble with other countries. Spain already hated him, England hated him the moment he ran for president, so pretty much wherever they heard about him, the hate began. This was putting everybody in the United States at risk; if Trump didn’t stop causing trouble, he would start the next World War.
With all the nuclear weapons being tossed around, a World War would wipe out everything. America would be the first to go – nobody had the patience to side with Trump. Serenity’s parents had voted for Trump without a second thought. They focused on the things he’d said that they liked instead of studying how many times he had lied, or discriminated, or said things that made other people want to do these things for him. It wasn’t fair. Serenity had this boyfriend when she was in the 9th grade; he based his entire life off the vibe of, “Nothing’s ever fair.” And she knew how well that worked out. Well, it actually didn’t. When her boyfriend had gotten fired from the great position he had in the company, he had committed suicide. Serenity’s life got a little worse.
The bus beeped its horn at the end of Serenity’s driveway. She swung her backpack over her shoulder and walked swiftly out the door, not bothering to say goodbye to any of her family members. If she had had time to think back to that moment, there is a strong chance that she would have said goodbye instead of holding her grudges. But as someone had quoted a few days ago, “Things never happen the same way twice.” That was as truer than anything else had ever been in Serenity’s life.
Serenity stepped onto the bus and sat next the first person who waved her over. For some reason, Serenity had gotten into what every school had ever called, “The Popular Kids”, somehow. It was surprising to her because she wasn’t particularly nice, happy, or stylish. Maybe it was just the air she held herself up with. She didn’t hold herself how she did by choice. Well, she kind of did, but if she didn’t everything she was feeling would bleed out for everyone to see. That was not something Serenity would allow. She kept her feelings to herself; it was her main priority.
The bus arrived at school and the bus driver barked out his usual orders: “Walk in a neat line! Go straight to class! Get off my bus!” and as usual the students walked out of the bus, waited for each other, and walked together in a big bunch just to upset the bus driver. They all wandered into the school, and then made their way to miscellaneous classes. Serenity skipped the wandering and headed straight to class before anybody else. She wanted to be the first one there so she could set up all her things, get ready for the day, and study the board before everyone else came bustling in.
The teacher came in minutes later; the students followed a few minutes after that, then class started. Ms. Leo, short for Leonora, announced there would be a half day. The reason for this is because they would walk to the elementary and tutor the 1st graders. Serenity didn’t like kids, but she got along with them fine. She had to spend half a day with some little kids. So what? No big deal.
As Ms. Leo had the student’s line up, Serenity in the back, an explosion went off. It was close to the building and the impact knocked most of the students over, “Under the desks, no, take shelter, no, fire drill!” The building was filled with screams as explosions wracked the building, shaking it until no one could think of standing. Then, unexpectedly, they stopped. Ms. Leo took a short break from cowering under her desk to look up. Most of the students were lying on the floor. They weren’t moving. Pieces of the ceiling had broken off, falling on top of the people who couldn’t take cover fast enough, “Oh no….” Ms. Leo pulled out her walkie-talkie and attempted to reach the Principal, but he didn’t answer, “Students?” Ms. Leo scanned the wreckage that was, not long ago, a schoolroom. Serenity’s ears were still ringing from the outburst of bombs. She tried to stand up, but something had her leg trapped, “Ms. Leo, is that you?”
“Serenity!” Ms. Leo rushed over to the only living student she could see, “Are you all right?”
“Yes, but my leg is stuck. Could you help me?” At this point in time, Serenity was sure that nothing could faze her. Most of her class was dead and she was nonchalantly asking her teacher to pull a desk off her leg. Would anything shake her emotions loose?
“Yes! Yes, of course!” The small teacher tried her best to tug the fallen desk away from Serenity without hurting her. Half of her goals, at least; the teacher managed to get the desk off of Serenity but Serenity grit her teeth as the desk put pressure on her leg, still, and pushed it into the ground. Ms. Leo pulled Serenity up and scanned the room again, “Students, can any of you hear me?” Her voice quivered towards the end of the sentence – she was near tears. Someone else, somewhere in the room, called out to Ms. Leo and she rushed over to help.
The shock was settling in as Serenity looked around her surroundings. Everywhere she looked, she saw the ruins of the school; she was lucky to be alive. The only people in her sight were Ms. Leo and the injured student. Was anybody else in the school even life? Serenity stood up shakily, ignoring the slight pain her ankle surrendered, and walked through the charred doorway. She looked in fear at what she saw. This classroom was the only part of the building spared by the bombing. What if the entire city looked as the school did? She slowly made her way to the craters left in the Earth, lowering her fingertips to what was left of the dirt. She raised her fingers back to herself, suddenly alert. The ground was shaking again. Serenity completely disregarded any pain her ankle was giving her and ran back to the classroom, hoping that it would be secure again. The sound of explosions was ruthless and wouldn’t cease. It continued on for what seemed like hours, but was only a few minutes, then stopped as suddenly as it started, like last time. She waited a few minutes to be certain that the bombing wouldn’t start again.
Her ankle didn’t give her any more trouble, not even when she started jogging. She ran swiftly, making her way to where she supposed her house would have been, silently thanking herself for taking track those few years. As she ran, she tried to take in all the damage done, but the dismalness of it all was starting to choke her. She ran blindly now, the tears in her eyes stinging and her legs refusing to stop propelling her forward. That was all she could think of – just keep moving. The cities around hers were small, and she could run through several of them in a day, so she didn’t stop when she got to the burned sign, “You are leaving Crailesville”. The next town was the same as hers: Burned, full of wreckage that was so misshapen she sometimes couldn’t decide what the objects used to be. The awfulness of all of it crushed her, sucking the air out of her lungs until she couldn’t run, but she reminded herself that if she stopped, she’d be tempted to look around. No matter how many cities her legs carried her through, they weren’t getting any better. If she didn’t pay attention to where she was running she would have fallen into too many house-sized craters to count. It was all too horrible to think about.
When she finally made it to an exploded countryside, it was nightfall. There was one question eating her brain: “Is the entire world like this?” She couldn’t be the only person to have lived through this. These nuclear weapons that have damaged so much couldn’t possibly have only spared her. That only happened in movies; and yet… Why hadn’t she seen anyone else yet, how was she taking this all so well, would anything ever faze her? These were all questions that consumed her thoughts. Still, she was finding no answers. The ground was rumbling again, and the wind whipped through her clothes. Her skinny jeans and flannel shirt weren’t putting up much of a fight to keep her warm against this wind. Before her mind could even form a question, a helicopter came into view in the smoggy sky. A man was reaching out of it about 6 feet above Serenity’s head, “Take my hand!”
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Hello, I'm Desdemona (but you already know that) and I'm here to drop you a review
I daresay this is a very interesting story. I liked how it was called "Unnamed", it added to the mystery quite a bit.
One thing from the start. Please try to make your paragraphs shorter, it's such a pain to read with poor eyesight like mine.
In any case, let us begin, shall we?
Question number one, which has been quite bugging me, really.
How do you live in a DOME? A dome is really just some sort of glass circular structure. You'd think it would crumble down in the event of a war, hum? Though maybe you've an explanation for this in your later chapters, I don't know. I'll be reading to find out though.
Question number two: What sort of mother doesn't force their kids to eat? Then again, she voted for Donald Trump so I don't expect her to be very smart, but man. She's got a crazy insensitive daughter who's never hungry and she never worries??? Something's fishy.
I could start babbling about all sorts of political bs you didn't consider here when you said no one would side with America, but you're like 13, and you shouldn't even be bothering with intense international politics, so I'll let that slide.
I mean there's a bunch of things that do not make sense here, such as an entire troop of a class going to tutor first graders and a freaking EXPLOSION happening out of nowhere. You know, it takes a lot for war to happen. Stuff is announced, intense news coverage blablabla. They just don't happen like that. This was a weak attempt at plot development.
In addition to that, I find it highly strange that out of the entire school, one classroom, which so happened to contain Serenity stayed up. Especially when everyone in it except Ms. Leo and Serenity herself died. Highly unlikely. I always say your co-incidences should be against your character, not in their favor. You mentioned nuclear warfare. How did this teen girl survive radioactive weapons? Think about it like this, Hiroshima was nearly wiped out, corpses freaking combusted spontaneously after the explosion. That was in 1945.
There is lots I can mention, but I'll leave it to you from here. Just read and read and read, you'll find them all.
Anyways, I'm not even going to mention the incorrect word choices as I'm sure you can spot them if you skim over your text. You also made a few careless grammar errors which you can spot by skimming a few times.
To sum it up; I found your story interesting, but you need to work really hard if you want to cover up your weak development. Also, please forgive my rudeness. I find that I'm especially rude with people I like when I'm criticizing them. It's for your good you know.
With love, hugs and kisses!!!
Desdemona (Izzah)
Thanks for the review, Izzah, you make some good points. This is the first chapter of the first book I've ever written, so I'm kinda unsure about how everything should work out, so I'm open to any advice. Thank you for the review!
hello E! fangir.. *cough* PHANGIRL*cough* here!
HOW COULD YOU DO THIS!!!!!!! leaving readers on a cliffhanger is EVIL and specially to leave an awesome person like ME , seriously how could you do this! this is so painfull! a cliffy and oh oh.. i'm hanging and..and i can slip any moment! EDEN seriously you gotta tell me what happens ... soon! dude seriously that cliffy is too dangerous for me...but it was well planned... so till you are going to tell me what happens next! i think i can live it *sighs* 
WARNING:rant!
Spoiler
now about the REVIEW!
I think this was well written but can use a bit of improvement here and there. i really liked the idea you put up there! really remarkable imagination^.^
and the names...oh the names! they are really interesting! i mean really who comments about peoples names...but duh you know me, i'm probably the siliest creature residing on this world...so why not comment on names...
the only mistakes that i found in this work is ...
"Was anybody else in the school even alive ? Serenity stood up shakily, ignoring the slight pain her ankle surrendered, and walked through the charred doorway."
and
"If she didn’t pay attention to where she was running she would have fallen into too many house-sized craters to many (i think you should insert this word there?) to count."
thats all i got...i know this was not really helpful...but duh! i dont know what else to say? i really liked this work...and it would be evil if you dint inform when the future chapters get published!
so yeah best of luck for future chapters...
Phangirl~
Well, I felt that it was necessary to end it in a cliffhanger or else I would give myself writers block trying to figure out what to put in next. xD

Thanks for the review, Phangirl
Also, thought I'd let you know, I'm in the middle of writing chapter four. I would post the other two chapters I've written, but I don't have any points, it's rude to beg for points, and I don't wanna write reviews. xP
@phangirldivergent46
Hi,
I love that you become so politically involved and giving your opinion.
You wrote a good piece but here are just some things that maybe you would like to look at. This is just pure about helping an other writer. (also Englisch isn't my first language so excuse me if i'm making a mistake)
'Spain already hated him, England hated him the moment he ran for president, and pretty much everywhere else hated him.'
I would make this:
'Spain already hated him, England hated him the moment he ran for president, so pretty much wherever they heard about him, the hate began'
(i'm sorry if im changing the whole structure)
'Serenity stepped onto the bus and sat next the first person who waved her over.'
Serenity stepped onto the bus and sat next to the first person who waved her over.
Like i said great piece, can't wait to read more!
Thank you for this review! English isn't your first language? That's okay; I still get the point of what you're saying. I'll be making just a few changes.