for we are only ever as dark
as the last day we remember this is just a pretty dream
that always ends too soon.
There's a lot of extra words here that I think you could chop out and rearrange to make the ending more...resonant...?
that the apocalypse will be blue,
I simply don't get this, and I wouldn't dare venture a guess.
Otherwise, I only have praise.
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