Well, this is certainly a poem as opposed to a short story.
I've read over this many times now and whether I'm just tired, I don't know, but this is very much perplexing.
Firstly, the grammar - on the second line you say the Moon Man meets a boy but then refer to him as a her. Then line three is capitalised after the comma. Also on the first line I would say 'a man' instead of 'the man'
I have to say that I am so intrigued to what is going on in this poem but I guess I will never know. In the end, I think that the moon knows better than me, the night knows better than me.
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