Published March 2, 2011
Written from the heart after a loss of a very loved person in my life. Please correct and give your opinion about it.
An Unknown Being's Heart
Feeling the cold hard stone,
Rubbing and itching in my chest.
Makes me feel that I'm prone,
To everything you've guessed.
People May call me heartless,
But I'll tell you there's something there,
As big as it gets, it's weightless,
Empty of memories, because I don't care.
I may act like a total freak,
Setting aside my emotions,
Without a laugh, smile, frown, or shriek,
I keep suppressed for an explosion.
Stay away from me, Human Being,
Before you catch this disease,
Forever thinking, endless crying,
Just back away… Please.
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--> first of all, I really, really like this poem!
--> next, hmm, I just don't get why the human have to avoid the speaker- maybe he/she was somewhat paranormal or something-
Good job!
this is really great! I absolutely love it
Thank you very much.
I really like this. THe emotion seems completly real and stron. I'm only gonna to pick on the live "to everything you've guest". I'm not sure what you mean to say but it seems odd. Otherwise this is pretty amazing.