Published October 3, 2010
Just another girl.
She's just another girl behind the mask of happiness
Just another girl,
Hoping to be noticed.
Shes just another girl who hides behind a frail front
And with one blow, her mask shatters.
Shatters into little pieces.
Showing her vulnerability to the world.
Opening up her soul and heart.
Drawing out the things that define her.
Hurt, hurting, in pain,
Scrambling to glue the pieces back together,
Hoping no one judges her.
They already have.
Hoping no one laughs at her.
They already did.
Hoping someone can relate to her...
Someone has
Someone will
Someone is.
Someone on the other side
Away from her shatter,
Is shattering too.
Shyly helping each other up.
Not judging
Not laughing.
But healing.
Just another girl meets the no one.
The no one.
Shoved around in the halls
Papers flying
Books dropping
Kicked
Punched
Stepped on,
The hoards of animals trample on.
No one left in the empty halls
No one left to pick up the tornado of papers
No one left to heal the bruises made this passing.
Sighing softly, no one walks to class and slips into the back
Unnoticed. Unimportant. Unneeded.
Daydreaming in class.
Thinking of being someone.
Thinking about always getting hurt.
Drawing pictures in class.
No one ever talks.
No one ever listens.
No one ever cares.
Bell rings, no one packs slowly
Hoping to avoid the crowds.
Hoping to avoid the pain.
Leaving class.
Meets the football team.
No one is there to watch them trample everyone.
No one escapes.
Outside for gym, no one is self conscious.
Always picked last.
Never good enough.
No one disappears to the bathroom
No one breaks down
No one is hurting
No one heard just a girl
Just a stall over.
Handing her tissues (toilet paper)
Is shattering too.
Shyly helping each other up.
Not judging
Not laughing.
But healing.
The no one meets just another girl.
~JMC
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Very well written...I feel alot of thought and emotion behind this poem...I know poems don't have to rhyme or have a rhythm but I rather like it when they do...but that's just my opinion...otherwise I LOVED IT!
I liked it a lot. I cannot say I exactly relate... but I can say I at least 5% of the way realate. I liked the peice and how you came about to draw out the two people (Im guessing on is you, or someone you know). It was very moving, and made a lot of clear, focused sence. In poetry it is a great way to get out a long of venting emotions without having to say who you are, what you do.. ect ect.... it's a great way to get out how you think and feel, and not be judged at all.
You did a great job and I really hope to see more of your work because I really enjoyed how you connected with a great topic with other people and pointed out somevery hurtful, but a real life thing.
Keep your head up and go on with a BANG! You can do it, and you can make it! (:
I loved this poem. I wish i couldn't say this, but I can relate so much. You don't realize what it feels like until your the one crying, and scared. Your soul shattering into tinier pieces, until you realize that you are the one who has to pick up the pieces and somehow put them back together while trying to appear sane. That is what many people have to go through and I'm glad that you pointed this out in poem.
This really reminds me of the poem "No one lived in a pretty how town" by E. E. Cummings. The whole part about the no one, maybe it's just me, but I saw no one turn into a person towards the end. (If you don't know that poem, you should read it to see what I'm talking about). I'm probably just over thinking it, but you should check it out.
The emotion in this was really good too.
This was quite interesting, but I liked it. It really brings to my attention all the bully problems and some people out there that sadly just don't have any friends. I went down the road once and I wouldn't go back. I know how badly it sucks.
As I was reading it I really felt kind of sad. And what made me even sadder was the reality of it. It happens all the time and there are plenty of girls out there that go through this everyday.
So did you mean to put that period after girl in the title? I was just curious because you usually don't see periods in titles.
Your use of emotion in it was great. I didn't see anything wrong with it, but I'm not really that good on giving advice on poetry. Keep up the good work!